Reflections

Running and panting for my life amongst the dark woods

Reflections

I’m surrounded by the woods. I

Try to run but I keep tripping and falling

I twirl a little to look back for the monster

That’s following me around. Chasing me

With a grim on his hideous face. I’m pacing for

My life. My lungs are falling out.

 

I might as well drop dead for the monster to

Finish off what had begun. Gasping for air

To breath but there’s no reason for me to

Stay alive right at this moment. Should I just

Roll off a cliff? I haven’t got no pot to piss in.

Kill me now and let me fade to somewhere I belong.

 

I look down on a pond and I see a face

An ugly, hideous face with a blank stare. What

Should be my reflection is actually not. I then

Realise that the same monster I see chasing me

Is the one I’m looking at right now. I take a

Deep and thorough look at this reflection.

 

But as I try staring at it. The stare pulls

Me in the pond. I’m at war with my reflections.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a brilliant tangle of imagery that clearly gets across the idea that a person is haunted by his own image, or that could be, something he is or has done. This is the meaning of SHOW instead of tell . . . a series of images gets across your strong message about life & facing one's demons. There are a few mistakes, but not enuf to detract from your convincing way of conveying your point (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Zipho_D]

Already working those mistakes Margie
Thank you so much

[jacob erin-cilberto]

often we are chased by our own reflection, especially when we don't like what we see---
i think most can relate at one time or another to the metaphor that shines through here...
fifth line of second stanza, i would probably reword...doesn't really fit with the tone of the rest...a bit too colloquial---aside from that..works with strong intensity.
j.

[Zipho_D]

Thanks J. I appreciate it
I'll try not to twist it, lol next time.