Elusive Recluse

Connect all the lines just to make out the noose

Lately there’s been a lot on my mind 

They say pain only gets better with time

But who the hell are they? 

Constantly spitting here say But it’s all just nay say

Because none of that s**t is true 

Who the hell are you? To be questioning what I do?

If my write is wrong

Then I’m not sure if I want to be true 

It’s not up to you To connect the dots and misconstrue 

You’re just making up facts

When you never knew the truth 

So don’t come to me with accusations If you never had the proof 

Because it’s not about what you know But rather what you can prove 

That was just training day lesson one

I just thought that you knew? 

You can’t have success without failure

I got it tattooed 

And it might look foreign to you But it’s a memory to me

I can do it by myself  I don’t need no money team

Just a whole lot of heart & help from the family 

In order to escape this poverty

I need to release this beast inside of me 

So I’ll skip the sorry There’s no need for apologies

Recognized as a visionary I might have got scoliosis

From these heavy burdens I carry 

Digging deep in my soul Like I got a dozen bodies to bury 

Writing so they hear me But I smile so they fear me 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is some of the best "rap" (for lack of a better word) that I've read on this website. I don't normally go for rap. I love to craft rhyme & rhythm, so people ask me why I don't write rap. Honestly, I just don't feel that it makes much sense, but mostly nonsensical rhyming, which is still entertaining. But I like a poem with a meaning too. That's why this is the best rap I've read here. Your word crafting is just as strong as your storytelling & it all comes together with a great zap of recognition, as your meaning goes along (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Wyrn Tiger]

Well I think you nailed what you were going for
You see most people rap like crap
so much that their lips go flapity flap.
but when I read this it feels as if I have fallen in a lovely trap.
Keep writing my friend.

[Zhavy]

I attempt to redact mistakes, mistake taking faith with fate, I miss taking walks with her in my mind

[Wyrn Tiger]

Okay truthful, don't take this personoly, but the bold words scream, "look at me", they take away the thunder of the other words, not to say they arnt good. you made a bold decision here so it is your choice.

[Wyrn Tiger]

I understand now it is a poem inside a poem. I need to remember this one.

[Zhavy]

Damn loool I dnd't even realize it was poem in a poem. I was going to change it. Im really glad you pointed that one out.

[Zhavy]

More of an original idea of literally asking "bold" questions, but the poem-ception really does work.

[fleamailman]

"...nice..." went the goblin who like it

[Zhavy]

Thank you, greatly appreciated. Wonderlands of the mind can only be expressed through a pen.