Brink Of Eclipse

There's no tomorrow without yesterday & today is a just a waste

Presently the futures out of sight The past is messing with my psych

See the change from wrong to right?

Sacrifices with a knife Couple stabs to slice it short  

But the feelings so unsure

Pressure diamonds into dust Why they believing in us?

I can’t trust in my eyes The greatest lie is perception

Expecting acceptions Neglecting life lessons Surviving depression

It’s impressive I’m not messing with drugs

Am I sounding dramatic? Because the feeling is average

Life’s getting tougher to manage & even harder to plan it 

All alone on this planet & I’m starting to panic

The feeling is plastic Don’t know when it’ll vanish

Ghost

I know where this road goes I’m just paying the toll

Lonely boy go for broke With creations from the smoke

Choking on life I can’t remember what a breath is like

Shedding light on the situation Just a victim of insinuation

I’ve been waiting on fate to set me free

When it’s something I need to seize

Believing it’s all for you You tell me that I can

But I don’t think that I could do it

Pardon I think I blew it But you already knew this

Sitting next to useless all alone

Been nothing but shaky ground Work a rounds to make it solid

Solicitating the solace 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a great rhyming riff in the style of rap (for lack of a better word). I like that your phrasing is intelligent, whereas sometimes this type of writing can seem like gibberish. I love that your rhyming is relaxed & uneven, whereas sometimes this style can be hyper-rhymed out to the point of distraction. This is really a well-balanced & crafted lyrical piece with great rhyme & rhythm (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Zhavy]

The kind words are more than appreciated, thank you so much. I love writing, it's my syringe in which I draw pain and emotion from myself and inject it within a piece paper. I'm glad to share with such a welcoming community, thanks again.

[barleygirl]

Very cool analogy *smile*

[Wyrn Tiger]

I have been thrown down, run a ground, turned around and beaten down but this one makes me smile so I no longer frown.

[Zhavy]

Love the support thank you so much. Really appreciate the rhyme, I'm all smiles.

[Wyrn Tiger]

I love writing reviews like that. It is not in my nature to write dull things. I am the lord of the bling, you write like the crusader kings.
Love the support
your a good pal, old sport
Now it is time for me to abort.