You'll never know me...

just the random garble that came pre-installed in my head.?.!?

 

Release me,

From feeling…

 

Make me numb,

Enough to embrace the cold space.

 

Where I can float betwixt sorrow and apathy,

In the ever growing ocean of eternity.

Eternal and ethereal my thoughts wander,

And I feel.

 

I’ll bury it all,

In my black haze.

 

And you’ll never know,

Never again. 

Reviews

[Azsa Wild]

bittersweet but beautiful, you should attend "sticks and stones" its a poetry night at the libertine by louis on magill road

[Cailean]

Love the use of "betwixt" - a word that should be used more often, but there are few chances to use it in the right narrative style. "ocean of eternity" is a great phrase as well. To me, it brings a memory of Quiddity, the dream sea described by Clive Barker in his Books of the Art.

Have noticed in your work you like using alliteration and you use it well. Like anything, it can be overused but you seem to use it as it should be done, as a spice rather than the main flavour. I use a lot of cooking metaphors for stories and poetry it seems :)

As to the content, reminds me of my experiences when I was younger. Feel better now and have found a source of constant amusement and fulfillment that keeps me going, I reckon :)

[Professor Quack]

Very nice michael. I like the bleakness, sometimes I would love to be released from feeling... Nice work.

[Tyler Bates]

Love it. There is so much gloominess for such a short poem. Great use of words too. I've been feeling a lot like this lately.