Lay Eyes Upon Your Beautiful Face.

The first time I've felt this way in a long, long time.

When the stars are all fading 

I will keep waiting 

The thought of you will keep me driving 

and baby I'm not ganna stop.

Waiting for you is like waiting on the stars 

they rise, then they fade 

and just like you 

you rise then fade away into the night.

I wait till the stars may fade 

to lay eyes upon your beautiful face.

Reviews

[Whisty_x]

I really love how short and sweet this poem is. It expresses the simplicity of love and I love how everything through out is related back to the stars - they are the main focus (bar the romance).

My challenge to you is - Play around with words; use words that have two meanings but both make sense in a sentence, or use something descriptive that has more than one meaning. :)

p.s. This is constructive, not criticism.

[LylaCrystal]

Few words, many emotions. It says everything.

~Lyla

[Alexzandera]

Beautifully written! Amazing imagery and very simple but elegant.

[Matthew Kult]

Pretty and pink

Great read

Matthew