Here on Writerscafe, the newest poem,
it pops up on-screen
like the latest off-shoot, or newborn babe
or like a newest floral bud,
in the orchards of poetry
Or like a fresh wave of words
crashing and cresting upon the turf
For all and sundry to view, enjoy and surf!
Or ha ha, even like linguistic kernels
that pop like popcorn
in the crockery of Writerscafe
with different flavors to choose from
to reveal what's been cooking in the minds
Some indeed spiced-up
some spicy
some acidic or buttery
all of 'em', more or less with melody.
Or the newest poetry is
to put it more exquisitely
a fragrant flower just bloomed
in the bedecked bowers of poetry
Or to say, each latest poem
pops up on screen
like pop goes the weasel
For poems pop up like meerkats
but on the lookout for friends instead of foes
Ah, and then they might wait
for the honey and jam of comments
and perhaps even the bitter gourd of criticism
But healthy criticism is like any bitter pill vital to health.
You're lucky if the doctors of poetry
refrain from prescribing chits of bitter pills to swallow,
Or opted for sugar-coated ones
for which you heave a sigh of relief
you didn't receive blunt sharp critique!
As I prefer sugar coated pills in all situations.
Yet if they do administer the wrong dose
out of sheer bias and prejudice
You can always give them a taste of their own medicine ,
if you wish to be vengeful and impudent
Or you can forgo, overlook and be lenient
For my poetry is meant to be tasteful
Harshly insensitive reviews can leave a sour after taste in the mouth,
As I'm habituated to taking sugar coated pills.
A prejudiced person could never appreciate my poetry
But all can comprehend my message hopefully.
So............ I'll be honest, I don't do sugar coated stuff, neither giving or receiving. If I like something even a little, I will comment or actually review, depending on how much time I actually have on my hands, and how much or little I can offer.
Poetry is far away from me, especially in English, which isn't my native tongue... But, even in my own language, poetry is something I have trouble creating, even more trouble than these idiotic drafts of idiotic stories that I share... And that is all okay, see I know and have accepted that fact, don't aim for things you cannot reach, and you'll spare yourself a world of hurt, humiliation, disappointments and so on. If you do intend to reach for them anyway, then don't expect 'praises' and the like right off the bat, just understand that you've got a ways to go, perhaps a lot longer than some others might... and that's okay too.That's just the same with any skill. (though I imagine some people have a nasty way of explaining that) When I picked up the guitar for the first time, huh... I was just a dumb metalhead who thought that enjoying music so much means it's gonna be the same creating it. Was I wrong ... as wrong as one possibly can be. But in the end, I have learnt so much I couldn't have even imagined before. Now, years later -years filled with frustrations, failures, having thoughts of smashing the instrument on my head, and cutting off my dumb left hand- I can actually play. I'm not a 'natural talent' but I can play, and I can create my own crap, just like with writing, there is a lot of waste surrounding the few gems that we actually produce in the beginning stages, and improving skills doesn't mean that we produce less waste, it just means that the gems are more valuable, therefore worth digging out from the crud.
There might be times that I actually create something half decent, and in addition to that some bits that are actually 'valuable' however, in the end, without this level of honesty toward oneself, it is not possible to go beyond one's current level of ability.... Just stagnate, being contempt by the usual 'compliments' from the usual people, who if for no other reason, well then out of habit will give those compliments.
I'm not saying you should want to push for something bigger or greater, that's up to you, but if you expect constant praises and the like, then you've got no other choice but to improve. I don't want to be 'published' and I care very little when people come bragging about 'oh I published xyz books, and I'm here to tell you that your writing sucks'
however, I also don't expect praises and acknowledgement as if I too had written something worth publishing.
Cheers
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Hi, thanks soo much for your time posting a fine long comment, yeah im not after praises at all, im.. read moreHi, thanks soo much for your time posting a fine long comment, yeah im not after praises at all, im more after poet's thoughts about my views, exchange of ideas, info, thereby broadening my view as well. And but if one wants to give me critique i want it gentle and sugar coated since if someone bashes my work too harshly with sharp rudeness i will be quick to think they're just full of destructive hate and not constructive criticism.
Interesting that english is not your language yet you write it so perfectly.
Im always learning on the job.
So thanks soo much for comment, im assuming that you didn't find my poem totally bogus and boring even if you didn't say much about it,.
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2 Years Ago
There isn't anything worthwhile for me to say about it, and so I didn't say a lot.
In my view.. read moreThere isn't anything worthwhile for me to say about it, and so I didn't say a lot.
In my view, some of these thoughts have had been there in all of our heads, at one point or another.
However, if I were to try writing a poem, I'd pick something that I can write about honestly and manage to end up with the piece having a sense of 'more' to it.
2 Years Ago
Well i write about everything honestly and don't ny poems make sense?
That is the question, isn't it? For its creator, everything makes sense, and all components fit and .. read moreThat is the question, isn't it? For its creator, everything makes sense, and all components fit and play the roles meant for them... And no, it isn't confusing to read if that's what you are asking.. but I fail to see what you would hope to accomplish by writing this particular piece.
It's probably not badly written, but I don't get the purpose of it.
2 Years Ago
Hmm i think you are nitpicking, because even if i don't see a purpose behind your write while i see.. read moreHmm i think you are nitpicking, because even if i don't see a purpose behind your write while i see so many purposes behind mine, i wouldn't say it out of politeness.
There are actually many poets who wtite purposeless senseless poems but all is art so its ok but i make sure mine has purpose and meaning.
A tasteful write with a lot of flavor and not too much spice. As for medicine I am not much of a pill man myself preferring natural remedies. Some rest, maybe a tea, plenty of fluids and not too much ruckus. As they say what ever doesn't kill you will make you stronger. So too with poetry and criticism,
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Aha, nice to know you are for natural remedies, yeah this poem was lightly seasoned not meant to be.. read moreAha, nice to know you are for natural remedies, yeah this poem was lightly seasoned not meant to be spicy. Thanks so much for super comment!
Hmm, this poem is good. The ending really hits. Reviews are actually made between the writer and the reviewer, in my option. You have to give them something to review. But at the same time, they can say whatever they want for whatever reasons they want and the reader can perceive it any way that they want as well. Good poem. You made me think. tyfs
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Um i feel even not so good poems are worthy of a review unless they're written carelessly without an.. read moreUm i feel even not so good poems are worthy of a review unless they're written carelessly without any effort to make them readable.
Im glad you resonated with it. Thanks much for feedback,
I like to call myself a poetess even though I'm no professional or conventional at writing poetry.
Have been writing poems for some time and readers say they get message and/or entertainment from the.. more..