The rise and fall of life's notes

Didactic poetic

Take life for an escalator
Go both through its ups
and downs
Ride it like on an elevator
Expect both smiles and
frowns.

Take life for a suspense
novel
you and I unaware what
the next day will hold
Meditate and muse, or
this book of life just
peruse
Pore over it to watch
life's mysteries unfold.

Take life for the open sea
But pray drown not
yourself in it
lest you lose sight of
God's shore
and thereby lose all
spiritual wit.

Take life for a candle
let its glow illumine
others too
and in each and every of
its flicker
Try finding a hint or clue

Each soul's life unique as
mazes of one's
thumbprint
And usually for many
life's quite an uphill battle
At times sweet as
molasses, at times bitter
as mint
and life's roller coaster
may shake you like a rattle.

Life tis like the rise and
fall of musical notes
Consoling to find people
in the same boats
Up and down, like on a violin
Sometimes you lose,
sometime you win
We are better off
if we commit less sin

Thus ponder over your
life and reflect
how good you've been
to it
and not just how it's
been treating you
Veer around the pit, and
keep your path lit
for darkness of the soul
is for you unfit.

Take it in its stride even if it's a bittersweet life
Downhill's a joy ride, uphill has to be strife

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Laura Kate]

'Take life for a candle
let its glow illumine
others too'

This reminded me of a quote from Buddha
- 'If you light a lamp for someone else it will also brighten your path'.

I enjoyed your poem, pointing out life's ups and downs, smiles and frowns, the very nature of our essence of existence.
Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Laura.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Warm thanks for fine comment. I'm wondering if I have read yours too as I read many poets here. Take care.

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Zaynab 🌸

In your stature of conscientious seer and scholarly mentor, you've garbed your voice in Free Style poetry to enlighten us in ways few can, or even would, had they such skills as your own.
Deftly, metaphorically, and concisely, you've run the full gamut of life's rollercoaster-like ride, from the physical, the mental, the emotional, and spiritual spectrums, you've hit most every nuance humans traverse and endure … the good, bad, and ugly, but surely truthfully.

You're a wonderfully skilled free-thinker, with a pen wrought in poetically star-sprinkled ink … thrilling, awakening, and wondrously entertaining to the minds of your stunned fans … I love it! ⁓ Richard 🍃

With but a wee touch of dialectics you might address, this is a sheer masterpiece of rare brilliance.
Thank you ever-so sincerely.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi dear poet Richard, Aww I'm honoured to get such a wonderful review from such a lofty esteemed poet like you and such feedback inspires me to hone my poetic skill and improve on it further. I could learn a lot from your admirable perfect poetry. I have got such acknowledgement from other English poets but I don't get enough of trophies as many are biased about granting me accolades even if they are not stingy with praise on the sites I write on.
Thanks ever soo much great poet, best wishes and long may you write!

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Dear Zaynab,
I find you wonderfully sweet and gracious in your acceptance and thanks for my humble review.
Hugs 'n blessings, Dear Poetess. ⁓ RJ

(psst! you might consider removing one of your review comments) 😊

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was spectacular! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. The last full verse sums up the entirety quite nicely. This represents what poetry should be to me, an investigation of ideals and paradigms and meanings. I completely love these words, "Thus ponder over your life and reflect how good you've been to it and not just how it's been treating you." Wiser words were never spoken.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi poet, why thanks soo much for a very great review of this , i love how you get and glean from it as its words that keep me going so i share to all to motivate. Cheers n best wishes, im wondering if i read yours recently too.

[Einstein Noodle]

sound wisdom for all S. lots of simile, allegory, analogy and metaphor to be had for all ... some of it cliche'd but the theme is so strong it doesn't take away from it much ... the escalator dates me my friend ... those, if any still around are like time pieces ... kind of like drive ins .. only more rare i think .. i love the "...shake you like a rattle." line ... it sure does .. and we are helpless in it ... kind of the way dogs shake their toys ;) the acceptance your poem speaks to is something i will try to take with me today .. it is an adventure .. we can make our plans both big and small .. but the day has its own agenda for us ... open and ready for the surprise is a good place to be ;)
E.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Yeahh man thanks for that novel comment, it imparts more life skills, the place to be is to be ready to be surprised indeed everyday, both good and not so good ones. Yeah some of does sound clichéd but I won't know what isn't, not my mother tongue this English . Dogs shake their tails you meant perhaps lol, ..So cheers and have a good day.

[Einstein Noodle]

no... i meant shake their toys .. i have Mastiffs .. very big dogs that love to play ... and they will shake your arm right off if you play tug of war with them ;) and on cliche's .. we're all learning eh!?

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow big dogs that shake arms sounds super fantastic and exotic.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Take it in stride no matter what comes at us in life. We need to do that and carry on.
I like all of the analogies you use here. And if the elevator breaks down, we can always take the stairs.

excellent write.
j.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hey our sensational poet Jacob yeahh thanks so much for a super comment that is uplifting for all who may read it! Cheers n best wishes,

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

And do come back with your great writes and poems after the break, plz don't disappear.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Zaynab... I appreciate learning from you... brilliant in its inception into the human Spirit. It all makes sense to me... and in the end... you have created a whirlwind of feelings that embrace our very being. Prayerfully, Pat

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi dear pat, i could learn a lot from your fine muses too and even your comment thoughts are eloquent and brill! Warmest thanks for review, take care, blessings. ⚘

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Zaynab... you give me smiles this morning... laughter is a Tonic.. Blessings to you also. gently, Pat

[Crowley]

And I hate doing squats....lol. What a great view of the world. A very strong personal and societal comment that everyone would do well to heed, wrapped in an amazing bow of writing. A great read for a Sunday morning...makes me feel fuzzy inside and ready to greet the day regardless of what point in the squat I find myself in.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Oh yeah me too, I totally hate doing squats and push ups, I love jumping up and other exercises like running etc, so I understand. We all hate the downs and like the ups right. I guess it would be an apt read for your church day too but it also poetically imparts life lessons to accept that life from all points of views will have both highs and lows right.
Even my secular minded friends do find the poem agreeable therefore.
Heyy and I like how you phrased your comment very artistically in a noteworthy way. Thanks soo much for that! Cheers!

[Carolynn]

This is a very good message and a great way to look at all the ups and downs life throws at us. If we steer away from sin God will provide more ups than downs! Hallelujah :)

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Oh yes indeed, staying away from sins helps us feel blessed and peaceful away from depression and anxietry and other downers, you are so right about that, I'm impressed highly how you said it.!! Warmest thanks for acknowledging the message, take care and stay blessed.

[Norman 223]

Such a full picture of what life is really about. For every negative aspect, there can be a positive. But sometimes the uphill can be the catalyst for a strength that we never recognised. Your poem has covered so many aspects that I may never have considered before. Thank you for the inspirations.

Norman

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hey wow thanks soo much for your interesting views and thoughts , adds superly to my poem! To think that an uphill can be a catalyst, yeahh man that's a fine idea and thinking! Cheers n best wishes,

[alanwgraham]

I really like your plan for this poem Zainab. How you have use a different metaphor for life in each verse. Your message is that life is unpredictable and we are certainly aware of that now.
I hope you are keeping safe and all the best.
Alan

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi poet thanks soo much for your fine thoughts and your nice cool feedback, yes life is unpredictable and has highs and lows. Best wishes, stay safe always...