Sing a Song of Taj Mahal

Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India Click on top side pic to zoom the picture of the Taj

Sing a song of Tajmahal
a fine nazm or a ghazal
Of this landmark for lovers
Ah, a lover's edifice
Complete with medieval bowers
It's a Mecca for tourists!
Tis sensational, tis exceptional
tis truly a touristy place.

Watch the shimmer of its magnificent marbled dome
Moonlight or sunlight, it glimmers of imperial chrome
It's ironical then
that though Indian-Arabian I am
I haven't yet been to this touristy place

It is truly as they must say, a lover's shrine
a place where hearts duly incline
They find it steamy
I find it dreamy
Oh, I've got to see for myself this touristy place.

Each of the marbled minarets
conceal such romantic secrets
for lovers to silently explore
to admire and to adore
A place human lovebirds couldn't ignore.
Ah you've got to visit this touristy place!

Two famed lovers lie in the legendary vault below
and the stream too it has a romantic flow
It's a lovers haven and paradise on earth
Even dead passions there undergo a rebirth
Ah, rekindle my love for you in this touristy place!

Extol I may this awesome imposing edifice
A greed for pure love is perhaps better than avarice
Löng live the legend of Shah jahan and Mumtaz mahal
Long live love and love like a Moghul
so forever we have this monumental grace!
Yeah take me my luv to this touristy place!

Author's Note

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Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Zaynab!
How wonderfully your words touch my heart, on into my very core, from your poem of this wondrous, other-worldly edifice.
The earth over, the Taj Mahal is know as the crown palace of lovers, and one has to but lay eyes on its incomparable beauty to know the reason why.

Zaynab,
My respect and fondness for your poem is without question. I love Free Verse and Free Style poetry, and Rhyming Couplets … all of which you've so very deftly included in your wonderfully composed and presented poem. My hat's off to you, my fine poet friend. The only issue I have is your use of the repeated word "touristy" in describing the Taj Mahal, because it lends a kind of advertisement/material ambiance to the mood, rather than the spiritually enthralling/romantically embracing wonder that it should portray.
A far better and more appropriate word would be heavenly, glorious. enthralling, etc; to touch the places within our imaginations that will take us heart and soul to this wondrously beguiling place.
Please, replace the word "touristy" with something more appropriately deserving, complimenting, and poetic.

Other than that, I think your poem is a virtual masterpiece, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for your invitation to enjoy it with you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much for your delightful review and constructive criticism. Your views on the Taj are richly poetic wow.
And yes as soon as i get the chance i will try to replace the eird touristy but i will use it at least once coz its a rare unused word.
Ok best wishes,

[Serendipity Planet]

wow , you really are good with words to describe what you love and adore
Its my dream to visit that beautiful place one day but with your words you took me there
Bravo

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Im glad to have taken a poet there wirh my words at least. Thanks soo much for a nice comment! Have fun!

[Jibey]

This is an exuberant celebration of this famous monument. You capture the romance of its architecture with enthusiasm and appreciation of its enticing secrets. It made me feel I should go there to re-kindle my own passions! Maybe you have helped a little - I too am 'greedy for pure love' 🌹

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Yeahh you should visit. Thanks soo much for a delightful comment! Cheers!

[Robert Trakofler]

Something tells me you don't need an instruction manual for passion:) funny thing is I feel this way too about a place too that I have never been in my own homeland...I have always wanted to see the grand canyon not as romantic mind you but in the minds eye the longing can be as palatable as the places destination and thats what I feel when I read this, The aspire of the spires and architecture of your musings are a wrap of desires intertangling your crave for love and it is a beautiful weaving picture and now I want to see the Taj Mahal:)... too!!!!

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi dear poet, thanks soo much for such a super comment, very interesting what u say. I've seen the grand Canyons and it is an amazing natural feature more charming for me coz God carved it. You should visit it coz u r lucky to be near and for me both it and the Taj are on my travel bucket list.
As for love my man loves me way too much, but i can't express my love for him coz he's too hot tempered. So i can't love him as much as he does. Im obviously too cool and calm therefore lovable lol.
Ok cheers and best wishes.

[Robert Trakofler]

I sincerely hope "Hot tempered" doesn't mean abusive:( I will get to the grand canyon eventually:)

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Verbally abusive one time, extra loving n caring n romantic the next moment. That's how my hubby is.