Sing a Song of Taj Mahal

Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India Click on top side pic to zoom the picture of the Taj

Sing a song of Tajmahal
a fine nazm or a ghazal
Of this landmark for lovers
Ah, a lover's edifice
Complete with medieval bowers
It's a Mecca for tourists!
Tis sensational, tis exceptional
tis truly a touristy place.

Watch the shimmer of its magnificent marbled dome
Moonlight or sunlight, it glimmers of imperial chrome
It's ironical then
that though Indian-Arabian I am
I haven't yet been to this touristy place

It is truly as they must say, a lover's shrine
a place where hearts duly incline
They find it steamy
I find it dreamy
Oh, I've got to see for myself this touristy place.

Each of the marbled minarets
conceal such romantic secrets
for lovers to silently explore
to admire and to adore
A place human lovebirds couldn't ignore.
Ah you've got to visit this touristy place!

Two famed lovers lie in the legendary vault below
and the stream too it has a romantic flow
It's a lovers haven and paradise on earth
Even dead passions there undergo a rebirth
Ah, rekindle my love for you in this touristy place!

Extol I may this awesome imposing edifice
A greed for pure love is perhaps better than avarice
Löng live the legend of Shah jahan and Mumtaz mahal
Long live love and love like a Moghul
so forever we have this monumental grace!
Yeah take me my luv to this touristy place!

Author's Note

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Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Zaynab!
How wonderfully your words touch my heart, on into my very core, from your poem of this wondrous, other-worldly edifice.
The earth over, the Taj Mahal is know as the crown palace of lovers, and one has to but lay eyes on its incomparable beauty to know the reason why.

Zaynab,
My respect and fondness for your poem is without question. I love Free Verse and Free Style poetry, and Rhyming Couplets … all of which you've so very deftly included in your wonderfully composed and presented poem. My hat's off to you, my fine poet friend. The only issue I have is your use of the repeated word "touristy" in describing the Taj Mahal, because it lends a kind of advertisement/material ambiance to the mood, rather than the spiritually enthralling/romantically embracing wonder that it should portray.
A far better and more appropriate word would be heavenly, glorious. enthralling, etc; to touch the places within our imaginations that will take us heart and soul to this wondrously beguiling place.
Please, replace the word "touristy" with something more appropriately deserving, complimenting, and poetic.

Other than that, I think your poem is a virtual masterpiece, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for your invitation to enjoy it with you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much for your delightful review and constructive criticism. Your views on the Taj are richly poetic wow.
And yes as soon as i get the chance i will try to replace the eird touristy but i will use it at least once coz its a rare unused word.
Ok best wishes,

[andrew mitchell]

Nice write. Yes it would be nice to visit when there are no people around, incredible wonder the Taj. And rich in history.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Yes rich in history, I like how you say it, yeahh so I guess it could get crowded and block some views then, eh yeah it would be nice to see it when it's more solitary like when the above two couples visited, it seems almost deserted. Thanks a bunch for the comment!

[Dave Brown]

Have always thought of this place as an incredible piece of architecture
Interesting to learn that it is also regarded as a romantic icon

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Romantic icon, wow you guys really know how to describe it in a better way that impresses my poetic heart, that's why I love comments, they increase your knowledge. Thanks so much for the review! Cheers!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

There is a beauty, a dance, if you will to your words. I think the Taj Mahal is a place that most would love to visit. I would particularly love to see the mirrored bath that he built for her. The candle light would reflect off of thousands of little mirrors as she bathed making it appear as if the night sky surrounded her. The inlaid flowers made of precious gemstones would be beautiful to see as well, and it makes me angry to know that British soldiers stole two of the inlaid flowers above a doorway that were made of diamonds. This place is art in its highest form - love.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wowww I'm deeply impressed by your brilliant knowledge and history info as to the monument, you told me some very remarkable things , some I didn't know and some I had forgotten. Ah yes the kohinoor and the diamonds you mentioned were usurped by the British royalty then.
Warmest thanks for your great honest and super comment. Take care!

[Relic]

The building certainly is majestic to see. I dare any man today to build a tomb for his wife and himself in the same way in such a beautiful setting.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow thanks soo very much for your great comment, indeed the way you put it is touching and superb as well. Best best wishes,

[Eilis]

I have a traveling spirit so I really appreciate the sentiment in this. Places we’ve never been can hold such meaning for us and call out for us to come see them.

You have a lot of great details in this that make the Taj Mahal more real to the reader. I do love the spirit aspect amongst all that. Nice work.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Warmest thanks for your great nice thoughts on this popular monument to love.

[barleygirl]

I really do love the back story of the Tah Majal, but I never thought about it the way you've written about it . . . a place that stands for love, a place to go to revitalize love . . . that's a powerful meaning in the midst of your enthusiastic sell-job about the tourist appeal of the place! I love hearing your impressions of the place, but I would've also liked to have more details about the history of the Taj Mahal, so we could better understand why it's a place that stands for love to you (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi dear, yeah many know the Taj as a monument to love for the mogul emperoR built it for his wife. It's nice you want to know the history and story behind it. Many couples visit it from the world over as a love spot. Warmest thanks for your lovely comment! Take care.

[kitty]

A true and humble homage/tribute to a glorious wonder of the world! Tis one to be admired and revered in all its glory> Thank you for sharing this imagery with us.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Warmest thanks kitty for your lovely refreshing thoughts on the Taj Mahal and my tribute to it.

[Chris Shaw]

Incredible architecture here my friend that inspires this very worthy write. What a love story I say to instigate the building of this magnificent monument with its lake. All that marble, I can imagine it in both moonlight and sunlight. A place certainly many have on their bucket list. You have tempted your readers here and I am now going to research it out even more. A great read Zay Zay.

Chris

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi dearest Christine, I'm glad to have caught your interest with this medieval monument to love. Warmest thanks for your sweet bright comment! Take care always...

[CD Campbell]

It's a really good poem you lay out for us on the Taj Mahal. I like the layout of your verse and your use of imagery and language. Good job. All the best. CD

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much for the nice review! Cheers!

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the way you described the amazing place. I would love to visit places like this one day. the poetry, feel of a song and wonderful words shared. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much coyote poet for a nice lovely comment. Nice to know u would like to visit the monument. Cheers!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.