Sing a Song of Taj Mahal

Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India Click on top side pic to zoom the picture of the Taj

Sing a song of Tajmahal
a fine nazm or a ghazal
Of this landmark for lovers
Ah, a lover's edifice
Complete with medieval bowers
It's a Mecca for tourists!
Tis sensational, tis exceptional
tis truly a touristy place.

Watch the shimmer of its magnificent marbled dome
Moonlight or sunlight, it glimmers of imperial chrome
It's ironical then
that though Indian-Arabian I am
I haven't yet been to this touristy place

It is truly as they must say, a lover's shrine
a place where hearts duly incline
They find it steamy
I find it dreamy
Oh, I've got to see for myself this touristy place.

Each of the marbled minarets
conceal such romantic secrets
for lovers to silently explore
to admire and to adore
A place human lovebirds couldn't ignore.
Ah you've got to visit this touristy place!

Two famed lovers lie in the legendary vault below
and the stream too it has a romantic flow
It's a lovers haven and paradise on earth
Even dead passions there undergo a rebirth
Ah, rekindle my love for you in this touristy place!

Extol I may this awesome imposing edifice
A greed for pure love is perhaps better than avarice
Löng live the legend of Shah jahan and Mumtaz mahal
Long live love and love like a Moghul
so forever we have this monumental grace!
Yeah take me my luv to this touristy place!

Author's Note

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Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Zaynab!
How wonderfully your words touch my heart, on into my very core, from your poem of this wondrous, other-worldly edifice.
The earth over, the Taj Mahal is know as the crown palace of lovers, and one has to but lay eyes on its incomparable beauty to know the reason why.

Zaynab,
My respect and fondness for your poem is without question. I love Free Verse and Free Style poetry, and Rhyming Couplets … all of which you've so very deftly included in your wonderfully composed and presented poem. My hat's off to you, my fine poet friend. The only issue I have is your use of the repeated word "touristy" in describing the Taj Mahal, because it lends a kind of advertisement/material ambiance to the mood, rather than the spiritually enthralling/romantically embracing wonder that it should portray.
A far better and more appropriate word would be heavenly, glorious. enthralling, etc; to touch the places within our imaginations that will take us heart and soul to this wondrously beguiling place.
Please, replace the word "touristy" with something more appropriately deserving, complimenting, and poetic.

Other than that, I think your poem is a virtual masterpiece, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for your invitation to enjoy it with you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much for your delightful review and constructive criticism. Your views on the Taj are richly poetic wow.
And yes as soon as i get the chance i will try to replace the eird touristy but i will use it at least once coz its a rare unused word.
Ok best wishes,

[lightsong]

so very lovely and beautiful, gorgeous expressions and thoughts, Your love is shown, felt and flowing through Your words, it's as though a magical touch of love's healing caressing us from Your words. Thank You for sharing this amazing piece my dear friend.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Ah warmest thanks for your delightful comment, I'm touched that you feel my admiration for this edifice token of love. Take care light!

[R.E. Ray]

You paint a splendid image and welcoming mood with this poem. We can see the beauty and feel the warmth from past and present. A truly enjoyable experience.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

And thanks soo much for such a nice lofty comment, wow yes it's a past and present edifice indeed. Have a very nice day, regards,

[George David Hope]

Thanks for asking me to review this poem. It taught me a lot about the Taj Mahal. I didn't know that there are two bodies buried beneath it. Always makes me think of the photo of Princess Di sitting in front of this magnificent building. I have never visited it either but I know a few people who have and say it's an image you never forget. I really liked this poem. Well done

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

I say thanks very much for your notes on the Taj, what you tell is interesting to me. Thanks so much for the comment, and hope you get to see it for real. Best wishes,

[Pryde Foltz]

Such a lovely and beautiful write. You really transported me to another place. Alas a place I have not been either:)

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Im super glad if i can transport a poet wirh my words yayy, warmest thsnks for a super cool comment. 🌸

[Gee]

Hmmmm, so he built this for his FAVOURITE wife !! What happened to the others and how many of them were there. Tis a grand gesture that says more about what he thought of those buried elsewhere in my book.
Enjoyed reading as it makes ya think .
Good morning

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Well well good morning, I like different views and your info is different yeah. Some sources put his number of wives as 3 while some put it as more than what is islamically allowed for a man. Anyway those were times when polygamy was more common and acceptable the world over in many faiths and cultures and wives surely were not possessive about exclusive love. Although promiscuity is the mod form of polygamy today and still common, a man maintaining several girlfriends and mistresses has the same polygamous scenario, effect and result.
So yeah mumtaz was his fav wife and it's nice that kings in those days had more than one wife so more women shared the riches and comfort. This favourite wife of the emperor died in childbirth thus touching him more than the others.
Thanks so much for your thoughts on this, appreciate it.

[John the Baptist]

Very nice tribute to the famed Taj Mahal. No expression of a man's love for a woman has ever exceeded it.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Ah yayy indeed, I love how you said that, it sums it up poetically swell, thanks for the great review!

[redzone]

beautifully written.... what a wonderfully place where to ghosts of Jahan and Mumtaz continue their love story and can be felt by all who visit... India is a fascinating country, its diversity of people's and cultures as well as the land itself is both mystical and magical.... love the poem S.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Ah wow thanks so much for toasting a tribute phrase to the ghosts of their love that has made this a popular haunt for lovers. Brilliant how you put it. Thanks for the comment!

[Sami Khalil]

"Ah, a lover's edifice
Complete with medieval bowers
It's a Mecca for tourists!
Tis sensational, tis exceptional
tis truly a touristy place."

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

So you liked these lines poet, thanks so much for your support! Means a lot to me.

[Sami Khalil]

"It is truly as they must say, a lover's shrine
a place where hearts duly incline
They find it steamy
I find it dreamy"

[Sami Khalil]

I always loved and admired the Taj Mahal and how wondrous it is. People all over the world are fascinated by it and the story behind it. I love how the Hindu Muslim diversity come together to make India great. May salam prevail and love too...

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Yes may love and peace prevail. Great you know a lot about this famed edifice. Thanks so much for the nice feedback! God bless.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.