Humans need a Hereafter

Life would
be quite worthless and short
If this is
the only
dear life
we
have
Great
plans just death can abort
to be
useless
once you
met
your grave.
And for
those who
die young,
in
childhood's
tender
ages
How short
and
incomplete life would be
How
unfair and
unlucky if
death's
the end
for them
Besides
life to the fullest is eternity.
What
about
those who
born
and die
poor
or those born deaf, blind or lame
What if
they were
so
doomed
without
any cure
How
unlucky if resurrection never came!
But a
belief that
there's a
life
after this
could be
of great
consolation and solace
especially
to the
poor
handicapped,
the
shortlived
that they
could
make it up
under heaven's grace!

For the
good one
who is born blind,
In heaven
shall he in
brighter vision see
And the
goodly
one yet
who
has lost his mind
will in the
afterlife
be as sane as could be.

The deaf
man with
his balance
of pious
acts
Only the
hereafter
would
compensate
what he
lacks
And that
godly one
born poor
and who dies poor
could be
of the
richest at heaven's door.

In this life
those
who've
been
saintly yet
unable to talk
could
cheer up
to believe
what
heaven
has in stock
For this
world can
be misery,
Heaven's
the place to rock
In this
world at
times
you've
to let the hawk gawk
Knowing
your
tormentor
in
heaven
shall ye mock
Thus for a
true
happy
ever
after
for an
abode of mirth and laughter
Work
towards thy hereafter
A divine
place
devoid of disaster!

O' God therefore after my death and demise
Do place me in a peaceful palatial paradise.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Very good. The sentiment works well...and you lay out the different aspects of life and those travelling through it for however long they may have on earth with respect and care.
I did find the one or two word sentences a little bit of an issue. It drags the beauty of this poem down a bit.

Personally I'd rather see it written in the format of the last two lines. I think it would be a more powerful bit that way.
But...that's just me. You have a powerful piece here. Very good.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks soo much for your great review and constructive criticism, ah yeah at times my computer formats my poems like that and some liked it in the past so I said ok let it be. I'm glad you realise the logic a bit in the content. Cheers!

[Hasan669]

I enjoyed this poem, especially its content and its message. The structure of the poem is interesting, just about one or two words per line, it seems as though the structure is borrowed from the Japanese form of 'haiku'? The poem is lengthy because of the very short sentences, but it avoids appearing like a prayer, which adds to its strength.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Thanks so much brother/ sir for your comment. My form and structure follows my muse ah. And you know there are great prayer poems too very creatively invoking send praying. Best wishes,

[Hasan669]

Well said about prayer poems. I fully agree. We seem to be two of a kind!

[Lydia Shutter]

Compassionate words filled with hope and deep faith. For those who believe in a hereafter, it is such a comfort. To think all the ailments from this world will be erased and all those we loved and lost will be reunited with us is soothing and comforting. Lovely thoughts. Lydi**

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Warmest thanks for your nice thoughts on this. We have to have faith and then we can think like your fine way too of all ailments erased. Take care . 🌸

[Chris Shaw]

Dear zay, zay. Pleased to see you my friend. Your words are so touching. Of course for those lives cut short, children who die as a result of conflict and starvation, it would be wonderful to think that they have moved on to a place of peace, where they would live for eternity. That takes great faith, and I wish I had it my friend, but when I look around me and see what is happening on this planet, any faith I had is confined to memory. It would be easier in some ways to think there is a hereafter,sadly I have yet to be persuaded. Words that will stimulate and get your readers thinking.

All good wishes

Chris

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Hi my dear pretty friend Christine, nice to hear from u and what u have to say. You see pal the bad situation on this earth is all the more reason we need a perfect peaceful afterlife. If this world of mortals with free will was as perfect as the heaven then perhaps there wouldn't have been need for an afterlife. All this smarter human brain to just end with death doesn't tally with rational logic don't u think. Anyway take care, there's only good no harm in believing in an afterlife.

[Chris Shaw]

I wish my dear zay, zay, I had your strong optimism. I will have to work hard on it. Love to you and yours

Chris

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

🌷 ☺️ ah pal optimism is vital neh.

[Chris Shaw]

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