Salazar

*Trigger Warning* Little short/poem that follows the pattern AA, BB etc. It is dark so be mindful of that

A man who sleeps with random w****s

A 4.0 student but she self-harms  

Because he has a dark past of violence and murder

Because her mother abandoned her

Can’t sleep cause of his nightmares  

Can’t sleep cause her mother's not there

Doesn’t care if he dies

Doesn’t care if someone kills her 

Excessively he drinks 

Excessively she's crying

F**k this he says 

Fucked her life away

Guess who they found dead?

Gets no news media, their deaths ignored

Haunted by their own demons 

He’s got a bullet in his head

Interesting enough the girl has a bullet in her head

It’s quit possible no?

Jay Salazar the recluse father

Jenny Salazar the bright daughter

Kid with no real father

Killer with no remorse for his daughter

Lost in their own worlds

Lost her support system

Mother will soon see them 

Mother knew it would happened 

No mother didn’t care 

No mother wasn’t hurt

Only emotion mother felt was

Overjoyed

Probably because it was originally her idea

Probably because mother wanted this 

Quite the psychopath for a mother 

Queen bee in her mind

Realizing she was the reason for their deaths

Relinquished her murderous appetite 

See she had done this 

She told them day after day they should die

Too bad nobody noticed 

Too much of a happy family image 

Understood by none

Ugly, yes

Viciously cruel

Vacant soul 

Who could’ve knew

What atrocities awaited the father and daughter daily

Xanax overdose

Xanax caused Valerie to die 

You can’t fathom why she would do this 

You couldn’t see how it was possible 

Zayir Salazar knew though 

Zayir knew because his mother forced him to commit suicide too

Author's Note

Here's my first short story in the format of a poem. Tell me how I did, feel free to critique and suggest as you see fit. Thank you for taking your time to read my work

Much Love

Reviews

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

A very dark tale of abandonment and cruelty indeed, Zayir. It feels like all the evil and intrigue in the world has concentrated itself in this writing and I love the read. I have observed that mothers are akin to God on earth but when a mother, by accident, goes wrong, she wrecks the deadliest of disasters in her children’s lives. Thank you for sharing this profound write.

[Zayir]

I thought this would intrigue you since it is quite dark. "The Haunting of Hill House" (Amazing show on Netflix you need to watch if you love horror). Mother's are life changing. I'm glad you enjoyed it

Much Love

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thank you Zayir. I love horror.
It’s such a pleasure reading you! Much love.

[R]

I found this interesting. I quite like how at first there seems to be no relationship between the man and the girl, but it gets all the more interesting when we discover they are father and daughter. I think it was very powerful when you said 'Only emotion mother felt was' and then put 'Overjoyed' on it's own line. Good poem, I'd love to read more of yours.

[Onlyme]

Excellent tale very relatable and true in many cases in real life I wouldn't be surprised at that. Cruelty, abandonment, drama and sadness all rolled into one epic poem.

[Zayir]

I'm glad it is relatable. I'm happy I could bring in all of those emotions into one. Thank you for your review!

Much Love