Deja Vu

A poem about afterlife.

Everyone says life is short

Though I don't really know

Honestly, we do depart

This planet awfully slow

Though in the end

Will it seem that way?

Will we want to extend

Our lives one more day?

That's what I'm scared of

The fear and the dread

Down below or above

I'll be gone once I'm dead

I don't have a religion

Not much to believe

To be born or rewritten

Won't make me relieved

I don't want a new life

But I want to exist

Can't come back as a foul spy

Or a dancer who twists

No, I want this life

Again and again

Same conflicts and strifes

Same laughter and grins

It might not be sublime

Sometimes it's whack

But when I catch up with time

I'll want it all back

Reviews

[Craba]

Wow this is really touching and makes you think. amazing

[ms. barrie]

This is a beautiful and very touching poem, very well written, great write

[Trillian]

Thank You!

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome :)

[Aurora Dawn]

Beautiful Poem

[Trillian]

Thank You!

[CLUTZ]

"But I want to exist," this is simple but beautiful at the same time. I really love this line most of all. & I think your poem is very relatable. Every goes to that place where they are unsure about death and dying at some point in their lives and it's scary. I just try to live everyday without regrets. Very nice.

[Trillian]

Thank you very much!

[CLUTZ]

You're welcome.

[WhimsicalAutomatonophob..]

This is amazing! I love this. It encapsulates the worries and strife of many in a poem. How one writes such poetry is beyond me. I find poetry (some of it) truly awe-inspiring. My talent lies in novellas and stories, not doing something poetic justice, so I commend for such a feat.

[Trillian]

I have the opposite problem. I enjoy writing in the form of short stories, but I have trouble dragging out a story for so long. So I mainly stick to poetry or occasionally write paragraphs of story lines. I'm glad you liked the poem and thank you for the review!

[WhimsicalAutomatonophobicHippopotamus]

Your welcome! My issue is actually the opposite of yours. I write the whole story in my head and then I get to writing and end up mentally tripping over my feet in a race to get it all down on a word document or paper.

[Ees]

In the third line I think that you meant "depart" rather than "deport". Just a typo, no big deal, I assume.

I like this. It's a poem that could only be written by a young person, it seems to me. Not that the writing seems young, just the sentiments, if that makes any sense to you. I hope it does.

I LOVE the second to last stanza, those words are brilliant!
Great writing. I enjoyed this!

[Trillian]

Yes, thank you for that. I'll fix it right away. I appreciate the feedback!

[Ees]

No problem!
Nice poem.

[Trillian]

Thanks again!