The Beautiful Night

The night sky gleams

It seems harmless 

yes indeed

with it's light from above

But don't be tricked 

you see

For when the clocked strikes twelve

The gates open

not regular gates

but the gates of hell

A demon or two may come out

searching for it's pry

roaming the streets

looking like we do

When it comes for you it'll be too late

for you'll be in the ground

and your soul taken away

It may seem as if it was a murder

from a person you see

but it's wrong 

for a demon attacked thee

The night sky gleams 

yes indeed

but it's like a flower with poison

So be careful around the night

and beware of those creatures

for you might be their next meal.  

Author's Note

It's my very first poem. It might not be good but i tried. Hopefully you like it

Reviews

[Lea Walker]

I love the dark twist. I don't really know what to say because anything I do say won't nearly cover how much I love this poem.

[WolfyZara]

Thank you so much

[MFrano1]

It's definitely different. Your other works are much better, but I saw that this is your first piece. For your first time poetry writing this is pretty good, and the rest just show how much you've grown as a writer and abstract thinker, which you want in an author. You're not stuck at the same place, you're consistently improving. So congratulations to you :)

[WolfyZara]

Thank you so much

[Nyu]

You are very creative :) I can tell by how much different things you brought into this poem. Nice first write!

[WolfyZara]

thank you very much

[RAP]

dark indeed, to mix the title, Beautiful Night with the last line, you might be their next meal. Why is it that we associate the activity of demons with night? Darkness perhaps, reduced vision, physical/mental exhaustion??? Enjoyed your piece. I like the phrase, it's like a flower with poison.

[WolfyZara]

thank you and be careful at night

[Daisygirl]

I love it! I love how it touches on the most basic fear of every child ever, plus most adults; fear of the dark and what's in it. Well done!

[lonewolf225]

I loved it, i love how deep the writing is and how it's telling the reader how dangerous it can be at night. But I think you're giving great advice to the reader about life in general. Amazing first piece!!!!