Avenger

A dream i had the other night.

I feel my heart beat faster

As I watch yours fail.

I'm screaming for help,

Wishing I could stop my frantic breathing

From stealing your air.

 

 

 

I grab your fragile form,

Nearly gagging as it breaks

Beneath my large hands.

My resolve, my forced calm,

It all crumbles as I hear

A gentle, "I love you"

As the life leaves your eyes.

 

 

My hope is gone,

I finally realize.

And i feel conscience leave me

As madness reigns.

 

 

I welcome this sleep

And let my grief known,

Knowing I shall return

to avenge your sad demise.

 

 

I shall live my life

To beat this madness.

So, for now, I let it take me

And scream my oath,

As I fall before you.

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'd like to hear what you guys think of this. I wrote it in like two minutes after i woke from a dream i had in class.

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

I just LOVE poems inspired by dreams, because no one in the whole world can EVER compete you with the uniqueness of its detail and originality. This poem was sad, full of anger with nicely chosen words. Keep writing.

-Wella.

[A.Lee]

Wow, this poem presented such brilliant imagery. I loved the first stanza. Excellent write.

[Chelsea]

Really loved this poem. This gave a stunning piece of imagery! I could see the lines as I read. My favourite line would be "Wishing i could stop my frantic breathing, From stealing your air". This was genius!
You have a spelling mistake in there ;)
fanally- finally
Another quick thing your i should be I. Just a grammar mistake!
Great write there :)