Sanity

My judgment day has finally come

I sit before those who have reviewed my crime

When I should remain silent

I can’t help but laugh

Feeling that person’s blood run through my hands

Hearing them take in their last breath

Well it just fills my entire body with joy

I can’t quite say why

Was it the adrenaline coursing through my veins?

Or perhaps the power that surged through me making me feel invincible?

I can’t quite say why

All I know is I sit before you

Awaiting the most horrendous punishment you can give me

So while you read me my rights

I’ll give you that darling smile

That was the last thing that she ever got to see.

Reviews

[SilentVerses]

Beautifully cruel in its ability to draw sickening terror whilst getting under the skin with its sinful fluidity, a forked tongue of hunger with no hint of remorse or guilt using colloquial language in juxtaposition to the raging desolation within. Harrowing and eerie with an airy aura of mocking cynicism.

[Francesca]

Nice! It's interesting to see the killer's point of view. Nice title, too.

[A Lost Man Found]

i loved this. it puts you in that mindset.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest feel of the poem. No regret. Just a truthful look at a deed done with no guilt. I like the complete poem. The ending was perfect to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Star Wolf]

This is rather scary! I'm certain you have it about right what a serial killer would be thinking in that situation. A very chilling and awesome write!

[KAREN]

Enjoyable intresting read!

[Calypso]

Wow so gory and gruesome . It's crazy that people do feel that way.

[Satchmo's Gal]

Just one thing. It's quit not quit. But other than that, great job!

[Cherrie]

this reads flat (as in a matter of a fact, not as in bad beer) cold and brilliant - well penned

[Truman S. Booth]

Freaky. But entertainingly so.

In line 6, "there last breath" should be "their last breath."

I can't grasp the purpose of the word "Well" at the beginning of line 7. I realize its intention, but I think those lines would flow better without it.

I like the repetition of the short "I can't" lines, although "quiet" should be "quite" in the last two.

Again, this is a darkly admirable piece. Well done.