Yes the message is clear, a brooding reminder of miseries tune.. Your talent to for word-smithing is obvious, very much enjoyed the artistic expression of this piece.
The first time I read this, I read it with a sarcastic air to it... almost a mocking tone, and I could not escape that. I pictured it as a short drama piece, a goth and an emo standing upon a stage, alternating as they speak each stanza, and attempting to add that much more melodrama than the stanza before. I pictured this so quickly and so solidly, I could not escape the image. Then I felt the need to try to read it differently, that somehow that in the way I was reading it; I was not doing it justice. As I paused for a sip of my soda, I realized something though.
That sarcasm, the mocking tone, that I felt; was not toward the act to take place. Rather it was the rather dramatic cry at life, offered with bitter mood - that I felt.
I'm only 19, I feel I'm too young to have a Biography. I think the most eloquent and honest biography I could assemble is quite simply interwoven in all of my poetry. Except that none of my poems ment.. more..