In the Mind of a Killer

I can see your pupils dilate

I can hear your heart race

As I pound my fists against your face

Blood speckling my face

I can't stop

You know I can't

 

Seeing your fear, hearing your pleas

The pleasure, like a drug

The power and the adrenaline

Coursing through my veins

I'm a god!

You can't stop me

Reviews

[Ralphy]

Wow, this blew me away, for I see a different side of a killer, it kind of intrigues me, the hostility that is driven out into the open. To think that someone lurks in the darken shadows whose soul intent is just to devastate another person. To slaughter him/her with no remorse�then again, there is an insanity that lurks in all of us, no matter how sane we think we are, we could be driven to the point of no return. Triggering hatred and bloodshed, it's like a very fine line, and when it snaps�watch out�great write although, scared the poo out of me�so to speak�

BTW The line "I am God, you can't stop" Wow

[Cherry Berry]

I think this would depict the mind of a killer very well. I enjoyed reading.
xox
Cherri

[Serend1p1ty]

It's hard to get into the mind of something & try to imagine how they must be feeling.
I think you really did a good job here.
A suggestion however, would be to make it more clear the kind of killer this one is.
If aggressive, use violent words. More calm and illogical, than use twisted or mundane words to describe the killer. I mean, this is merely a suggestion.
But other than that, I enjoyed the read.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I think the great killers are those who do so without motive other than personal pleasure and the murders they commit are without guilt or remorse because they are sociopaths and incapable of such emotion. They are generally pleased with themselves and their work and often have godlike ideas of themselves so that was a nice touch. Killer poem. lol

[Jason]

I love how demented this is. Right in my wave of taste, honestly. I love how you created this from the killer's point of view....excellent job!