When I Leave

This was written in the hope that some day it can become a song. The lyrics are about my thoughts a few days after i came out of hospital after i attempted suicide last year. im ok now btw

I don't know what I need
I feel guilty, that's how I plead
Disturbing things I see
Oh in my head is where they feed

I regret it oh so much
I don't even feel when I touch
They tell me that i must
Go talk to someone, they caused such a fuss

When I leave, I will be strong
I will recover now it won't be long
All my troubles will be gone
I'll prove to you that there is nothing wrong

Today, life came to me
It tole me that I cannot leave
It wasn't meant to be
That is what I could not see

When I leave, I will be strong
I will recover now it won't be long
All my troubles will be gone
I'll prove to you that there is nothing wrong

The pain I put them through
I couldn't help but drop some clues
I only told a few
The suffering just grew and grew

Anybody with eyes could see I was down
Anywhere I went I was followed by clouds
Even if it was a sunny Summer's day
I could not stand the light, I wanted to be on my way
Everyone knew I was devestated
And they also knew that I couldn't take it
Some wanted to put me in and throw away the key
No, it is not a prison cell but it might as well be

When I leave, I will be strong
I will recover now it won't be long
All my troubles will be gone
I'll prove to you that there is nothing wrong

When I leave, I will be strong
I will recover now it won't be long
All my troubles will be gone
Oh this mess, I'm going to step away from

Author's Note

Any tips or constructive criticism would be great. Thanks.

Reviews

[Liz]

Wow. I REALLY like this, it's just great. It'll make a fantastic song someday. The words and feelings you expressed are phenomenal all on their own. My favorite repeated stanza is:
When I leave, I will be strong
I will recover now it won't be long
All my troubles will be gone
I'll prove to you that there is nothing wrong

I really enjoyed this.
Great job!(:

[PIG-RHCP]

Thanks Liz , glad you liked it. This song has a really big meaning for me behind it so i let loose when i wrote it :) .