Wonderment

We finally learn the secret that is the man and his plan.

"Well, it all begins anew. With that having been done I carry on my lonesome way for my 'Society'. With having all of the seeming imposers of change i begin the new beginning. As it may have seemed that our society having been brought up on old ties was a working order for me was well in a sense not even worth it. If it was a good place then there would've been no famine, war, disease or (if i should even say it) Revolution. But, that was old news ever since the cloning facilities have been opened and ever since i was the CEO of that industry. It worked out that i begin the process of overthrowing the invisible shroud of nothingness and color that shroud to my liking. 

With the power of cloning under my fingertips it was quite easy for me to begin revolutionary thinking. Without that key essential detail i would have been one of those picketers saying the world is going to end tomorrow. But, that wasn't the case. Except the only problem between my idea and the act of it happening was the people. But, since that is a little fuzzy in my head i cant recall that. Any who, it is all unfolding my dream my satisfactory my EMPIRE!" i said to my new underlings. They gazed upon me with admiration and fear but either one would do for me. As i walked down the steps and down into my little office. I felt a certain form of paranoia around me. I quickly turned around to see my new "secretary" behind me. She was a well built woman. She was roughly 120lbs 5'3" and had the most beautiful red hair any man could dream of. 

"Excuse me Gabriel.... I mean Mr.Todesfall." She studdered, :You have a visitor in your office. Oh, and your five o'clock canceled at the last minute."

"Damn it! Julia you know how I hate it when you tell me last minute when i have a visitor." I said. She knew i was right and began to apologize but i waved her away and looked at her cute little but move as she ran. 

I entered my office to see that the person siting at my desk with their feet on it was none other than my second in command Damion Hungersnot. I was wondering what he has to report because he was sent to the edge of the country to survey the borders. If he was back this soon it could only mean one thing, Bad news.

"Why the f**k are your feet on top of my desk?!" I exclaimed rather loudly. This short outburst seemed to unsettle him but, it wasn't him. I examined the image to finally understand i was fooled by none other than a hologram.

"I still can't understand why we use those damn things."

"It's because you're still old school." The image replied with a smile and continued. "We have found out that there is a anti-Todesfall group on the southern border. Also, these ones were smarter than the last and took out about 20% of the troops."

"DAMN IT!! What have i said about taking these raids seriously! Those are real people risking their lives for the betterment of society." I exclaimed.

"They were just the clone group. I mean seriously Gabriel that isn't that bad. It's not like you cant just turn out more of those fuckers with a single command." He said with a sort of sadistic twist.

"So what if i can it doesn't matter with those 400 clones dead that will cost us another 20 million. So, in lack of other words you aren't going to get those troops back. Also, find yourself lucky this time." With the rest of the orders received the image blinked out or so i thought it popped in just to get that last word in.

"Just to let ya know. I still love ya little bro."

"God Damn it!" Why did he always have to say out loud that we were related. It didn't matter for at the moment was another problem at hand, the recurrence of those anti-Todesfall groups.

Author's Note

Anything you deem necessary.

Reviews

[Weaver]

comma after "having been done"
"With having all of the seeming imposers of change" - extremely awkward - what does it even mean? - comma after "change"
"i begin" - ALWAYS capitalize "I"
"As it may have seemed"- another sentence that I cannot begin to make sense of - far too convoluted and probably missing punctuation
comma after "good place"
"if i should even say" - "I"
Why is "Revolution" capitalized?
"But, that was old" - no comma
"have been opened" - "had"
" i was the CEO" - "I"
"worked out that i begin" - "I began"
"process of overthrowing the invisible shroud of nothingness and color that shroud to my liking" - If he's overthrowing it - getting rid of it - how then is he coloring it to his liking? It's gone.
comma after "under my fingertips"
comma after "essential detail"
"But, that wasn't" - no comma
"the act of it happening" - "the fact of it happening"
"But, since that is a little fuzzy in my head i cant" - "But since that... I can't"
"Any who"- "Anyhow"
"it is all unfolding my dream my satisfactory my EMPIRE" - "it is all unfolding: my dream, my satisfaction, my EMPIRE"
comma after "admiration and fear"
comma, not period, after "into my little office"
"felt a certain form of paranoia around me"- This doesn't mean what you think it means... Try "felt a certain paranoia of my surroundings" or something like that.
"a well built woman" - "well-built"
"roughly 120lbs 5'3" and had" - "roughly a hundred twenty pounds, five-foot-three, and had"
comma after "Excuse me"
"She studdered, :You have" - "She stuttered. "You have..."
comma after "Julia"
"tell me last minute" - "last-minute"
comma after "began to apologize"
"looked at her cute little but move" - "butt"
comma after "second in command"
"what he has" - "had"
comma after "back this soon"

There's the (partial) proofreading to give some idea of where the errors are.

I hope we aren't meant to like this narrator. He's rude, he's arrogant, and he has a bad attitude toward the people who work for him - and that's just for starters. I do get the impression that he's meant to be that unpleasant, though.