Through My Eyes

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Withered in anguish, I speak more than English.

Words of urbane apprehension, zephyrs of youth,

Trapped in an uneasy furver, of manners and couth.

Theoretical, poetical nonsense; peevish and chatty.

Utter torpid attempts, tweaking tempestuously,

To inform a boy soldier, of combat's real nature.

My tight-knit syndicate, drunk with spunk and grit,

Amaze the spectators with their keepsake luck.

A spry tiny threshold, I barely made it through,

Alive, though in the foreground, a body turns to ash.

To speak of topics taboo these days...unleash government wrath.

 

I take you to higher places, your mind cannot replace it.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Dushyant Thadani]

How do you write such works which are so very raw and captivating, that it holds the attention of the reader all the time. It is like simple, yet dark, which makes it so thought provoking. I really don't know which classical poet's spirit might have come into you, because your work is always unreal and amazing. Great work once again Zackery. Keep writing like this.

[Ruth]

This is great, powerful and you have used metaphor to create a slap around a face in a good way lol
Government doesn't want us to voice that which is challenging to the norm! They do not us to heal the divide!
Excellent!
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot to comment on with this poem. Some of the statements could stand on their own.
"To inform a boy soldier, of combat's real nature."
Life teaches us best to listen and understand. A lot of people speak double talk.They tell us lies and wrapped up words in pretty boxes to hide the B.S they are saying. Writers must see the truth and write it down. Without Hemingway and the many great Poets. WW1 and WW2 was a easy victory. It wasn't. Government want us to forget the bad things. A outstanding poem. You made me think.
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[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love the multifaceted tenacity of the poetic statement~ fantastic composition bringing through the thoughts within the core clearly~

[Kathryn Saunders]

Amazing. I really loved your usage of words and the flow of the poem. 10/10

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is so good! very unique!

[steph]

I like the complexity of this poem. Their are many layers that need to be peeled through in order to grasp the whole concept that you are writing. That's Good however cause that means people should get something diffrent out of it with every reading of it. esspecially when their moods are diffrent. BRAVO!

[E.H. Monroe]

I'm rocking to it. It's got blackest smoke and some fire. The boxy structure busts my balls though. You have the soul of an old slam poet, working the paper and making it stand on end.
I just want to be able to read it how you are saying it. Are those your breaks? I wanna see this b*****d in lights, on stage and hear how the poet intended.

Nice shooting sir