Trade Winds

Waves came crashing down
on top of moonlit shores,
each of them were stars
above aphotic floors
Never standing still,
always going away
I hold on to one
but it does not remain

Currents look like contrails
scattered through the sky,
moving to this destination
in my mind
Somewhere distant from
sedimentary faith
When I am submerged
you become everything

There is a seashell
that I can not forget,
buried on a beach
within my loneliness
Someone else is sand
and fills up every choice
Each grain understands
that I can hear your voice
sound like the ocean

Reviews

[Brian Csati]

I appreciate the imagery in this piece. Your choice of words are wonderful except for maybe a few lines that can be played with a bit. Otherwise it was excellent to say the least.
-Brian

[Sophy Freebirds]

I am sorry for being so late to review your work.. But this piece really has the expressive power. It feels like i have been taken to that place of sandy beach. The ending f the poem is what i loved the most -the comparison of you a seashell surrounded by the grains of sand.The intimacy of the grains and sand is really well described. A really good one. keep going :) *takecare*

~Sophy

[icelandicblue]

I agree with Julie. This is really beautifully calm and peaceful but there is a distance from the imagery as if it can't quite be grasped much like sand through your fingers. I am happy I came across this poem. There is something mesmerizing about it. You've capture the mood of the ocean within the emotions of the poem.

[MsJewel]

While the images you have created are soft and beautiful, I could feel the sad lonliness in your words...
"When I am submerged, you become everything"... that line seriosly gave me goosebumps.
This is a poem I will read again and again. It is lovely!

:) Julie

[Moonie]

This is one of those few poems that really leave an impact on the reader's mind. The various references to the ocean make it even more imaginatively palpable (woah, big word! :D). Also, I really enjoyed the little rhymes that you've scattered throughout the poem.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

OMG! I love love love this poem very well written and the flow is lovely

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Amazing work. The deepness of your though is well expressed again. The emotions perfectly felt with the lyricism. Great great work. Keep posting Zachary

[Amber Lily]

This was amazing. Your work to me kind of has a lord of the rings feel as dorky as that sounds. The songs they have in the movies are similar to this :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Lol I don't think it's dorky I love Lord of the Rings! I have a tattoo in sindarin tengwar/from Riddle of the Strider, one of my favorites :) thank you amber

[Amber Lily]

Agh that's so cool! :)

[Eliza Mae]

You are a modern Lord Byron, truest in the flesh!
Insightful, flamboyant, words never put to rest!

Bravo, Zachary.. You picked me up and placed me there, on the beach you described so effortlessly, and I, too, felt the emotion of loneliness and longing.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Aw that's such a touching review! :) thank you so much. Romance wouldn't be what it is without Lord B lol. Definitely put a smile on my face today

I thought if I showed people the way there they might find me.

[Eliza Mae]

And found you we have!

Smile always...
-E. M.

[Kaitlyn Polcini]

In heaven! I love this for its melodic sound. This poem is lovely.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you :) everything I write is meant to be/is a little song so I always try to infuse some kind of melody if I can. Appreciate the review!