Nothing Cold

Maybe I could someday find
a destination far from sight
Something I could call my own
not broken, tired, flesh or bone
So I don't look for any one of you
I leave myself with nothing much to do

Maybe if I shut my eyes
and felt closer to whats inside
I'd see you in another way
than a tear,
falling down my face

Standing here until
you touch the floor
or find a way back in through
open, pleading pores,
like part of me was not there
anymore

I don't need you here
to grieve over the shame
of knowing that I let
My light, with our love
fade away

If you should return
upon struggles in your beliefs,
Don't let the fire go out
when alone with your
darkest dreams
If my fingers were candles
and your open mouth in flames,
I would reach so far inside
nothing cold would remain

Reviews

[Frontier]

You've done it again! You always deliver something fresh and new, that I probably would've never imagined.
You have an ability to pinpoint feelings that many people may not wanna recognize and present them with such sagacity and vivid images.
Great job!

[Zakari Schmidt]

I always look forward to your reviews, thank you frontier! Your kind words mean a lot to me :D

[willweb]

Wow Zachary, this is outstanding. This one grabbed me early on and wouldn't let go. The imagery and the emotions penned ripped hard against my heart. I really enjoyed this today.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Hey thank you for reading, I appreciate your kind words and am glad you enjoyed! Cuz I certainly enjoyed the review. And I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work! Thank you again

[Eliza Mae]

You never cease to impress me, Zachary..

This poem is so sad and inspiring, it tugs on my heartstrings! I love, love, love this poem and I love, love, love, your style of writing! You are so contagious!!

[Zakari Schmidt]

Awwwh thanks Eliza! I feel so lucky to have you reading my poetry...maybe it's your reviews I find contagious lol. Sometimes its encouragement like that, that keeps me writing. Or posting, at least. Thank you, from the heart

[MomzillaNC]

A profound apology and earnest promise… The lines "Maybe if I shut my eyes; and felt closer to what's inside; I'd see you another way," are perfectly sum up the ardent yearning of the narrator.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you so much for the read and insightful review, some of the most constructive, I always look forward to it!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I always hope to be helpful.

[AprilRN1210]

woooooah!.. this is pretty intense.. the imagery alone is stunning.. especially the ending..

" Maybe if I shut my eyes
and felt closer to whats inside
I'd see you in another way
than a tear,
falling down my face"....my favorite..... so touching as well as vivid..

the pain, the longing.. the regret.. the second guessing.. the hope dying.. all felt here.. hindsight is always clear and enlightening.. we can all say what we WOULD do different.. what we would do if given a second chance.. easily done while reflecting on what went wrong where.. with nothing but time on our hands filled with missing them...

well done my friend.. you are indeed talented.. the flow, phrasing, and imagery hit the reader with powerful emotion..

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you for the awesome review April, always puts a smile on my face. Coming from a talented writer like yourself, such praise means a lot to me, every time. Sometimes words can't describe, thank you

[AprilRN1210]

you're more than welcome, my friend.. likewise, I look forward to your reviews.. the last one had me blushing and near speechless.. ((hugs)) to ya!

[Zakari Schmidt]

Many hugs to you April :) I'm flattered I could make you blush!!