Chevalier

Idea struggled with the Thought
Moments when one turns in two,
does it feel like tearing off
or creating something new?
In the mirror you are here
distance to the other side
is not measured in your hands
but reflected in your eyes

Idea struggled with the Thought
how do you divide a dream
while the world raises its guard
Mother Earth falls asleep
and I would stand in front
until her shield came down.
The armor that we wore
doesn't get used much now

But of course you would settle
for leather instead of metal,
feathers instead of a cape,
image instead of a shape
because
you knew I'd stand in front
until your shield came down
Memories are only
ideas, thought about

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

this one lost a little bit towards the end for me.. love the first two stanzas.. the repetition was well done there.. the subtle rhymes pleasant and flow nice.. it felt dreamy, misty thoughts and emotion... the last two lines in first two stanzas are my favorite.. in my opinion those lines are pretty awesome.. so overall well done.. just felt a little "let down" with the way it ended.. I will say, it is nice to see you and tickled that you have added more writing.. :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Hey it's been a while friend. Although this is currently my favorite poem, it's also been my writers block tool as I've played with it for weeks. Wanted something different than some of my recent posts that i haven't been real satisfied with. My original draft was much longer but condensed, it gave the vibe I desired, as far as a let down at the end. Wanted to capture the fleeting feeling I've been dealing with in life recently. But regardless, thank you again :) I'll be reviewing soon

[Awakened Rose]

"While the world raises its guard, Mother Earth falls asleep" those lines stuck in my head. This was another magnificent piece. I love poetry that is laced in wisdom. Great work!!

[All I See Is Blood and ..]

There my be an infinite number of words but one manages to explain what I think about this poem........beautiful.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Feelings mutual...the only response I can conceive is 'thank you' ..I appreciate it!!

[All I See Is Blood and Vampire Girl]

My only reply is your welcome

[Amber Lily]

This doesn't happen to be about writers block does it? Because if it is it fits perfectly! I'll sit in this chair all day until I think of what to write!
Also I can see it as trying to deal with a very difficult person that won't let you in. But you love them so you will always wait for them to open up.
Loved it!!!

[Zakari Schmidt]

Wow..it actually was about writers block haha. I hadn't posted anything in like 2 months before this. Which is why such positive feedback makes me smile so much. Thanks amber :)

[Faraway Sado]

This is such a beautiful one and the ending is absolutely superb!

[Zakari Schmidt]

I am glad you enjoyed reading it, thank you

[misha]

I absolutely loved this piece. Every line had me captivated. Keep it up!

[Zakari Schmidt]

Hey thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) and I will certainly try!

[misha]

You are welcome =)

[MomzillaNC]

This is like a haunted dream sequence

[Zakari Schmidt]

That's what I think too!

[MomzillaNC]

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[Eliza Mae]

I admire your creative perspective and rhyme so much! Beautiful poem, Zachary! BRAVO! *applause* :D

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you for the kind words my friend, the admiration is mutual! :D