Time Capsule

Open in 2020

Birth into Earth,
from womb to your tomb
I still wish that I had
arrived on the moon
wrapped in alien flags
Like a flower in bloom
petals, roots and a body

If a part of us is dark
are we not meant to shine
The tiniest spark
can still electrify
When you're next to me,
in the shadow of our destiny

The concept of change
swollen in my heart,
still flows from my veins
As light from a star
The whole milky way
was poured over my brain
and I felt like a human
On the road from Heavens gate
into the galaxy
Like our love was scattered
through this cosmic tragedy
to learn again

Author's Note

Edit #3

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

I find the way you write quite interesting, honestly... there are a few lines that really stood out for me in this piece... "If a part of us is dark, are we not meant to shine?".... I have contemplated this more times than I care to count... I am someone who is different and am learning that I can balance the lighter with the darker sides of me... This is a deep, layered, meaningful piece, that I rather enjoyed. well done! can't wait to read more of your work....

[Zakari Schmidt]

Aw thank you, I'm glad you liked it. Writing that was a gradual process! A review means that much more when the effort put into your expression is recognized. In the layers of my poetry I try to capture that thought and I just hope I do it justice. Also, feelings mutual :) more work to come!

[AprilRN1210]

I understand and agree completely.. when our effort is understood, acknowledged, and appreciated it means a lot.. you did do it justice with this piece... and you are more than welcome, it was my pleasure..

[Amber Lily]

I am finding that all your work tends to make me think which is great! Why were we all born as humans and not a species on some other planet? And why in this specific time? What is the ultimate goal of our existence?
I have no idea... but it's food for thought! I enjoyed it :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you so much, I totally appreciate your reviews. They're quickly becoming some of my favorites. Hope I could feed your mind :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Concept of change- light of the star in veins.- i liked this simile. You have a different way of portraying things which is quite admirable.. :) i am s lover of the cosmos so this had me thinking for a while.. the cosmic tragedy!! Huhh?? Can't help it though but keep rotating in this milky wau of your life.. well done :)

~Sophy

[Zakari Schmidt]

Hey, thank you! Different portrayals and perspectives are things I strive to achieve when I write...hope I came close. Kinda like alien POV. I'm really glad u liked it though...to me, the cosmic tragedy is like we've realized how small we are in the grand scheme of things. We are instruments in an orchestra. Nuts, bolts, wood, brass, strings and souls. Nothing and everything at once. That's some real beauty ha, the realization of ones mortality.

[Sophy Freebirds]

O yea i get it lad!! Just like the bucket theory.. :) was a pleasure..

[Frontier]

Oh wow...this is beautiful...the comparison of our darkness with space, very nice!

It is dark in such a lovely way.

"Birth into earth, from womb to your tomb. Before that had a better view. Before my only thought was you, there wasn't much of me."- ahh love this, so to the point, it impacts!

" I still wish that I had arrived on the moon with American flags and flowers in bloom left to cover my body. "- here its more murky but I sense you're saying a lot here.

Writing about change...ahh great..rarely see that. That ending sent shivers.

Respect. :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thanks for the awesome review! I'm glad you liked it enough for parts to stick with you. Outer space is a common setting within my writing, as there are no boundaries. No gravity. Darkness. Then I try to add some kind of personality to it haha. Thanks again! :)