At First Glance

This is a poem I wrote my freshman year of high school, and it has a lot of meaning in it. (Well, I put a lot of meaning into it, but I don't know if people will catch it.) So yep, enjoy~

At first glance,

I swore I became blind

By the sight of dazzling,

And flawless, lovely perfection

Of musical movement that swayed

My adolescent blue eyes.

At first glance,

I thought I had a glorious trance,

But then I have come to realize

My eyes perceived a realm of honesty

And truthful beauty

Beyond any imagination and mankind.

At first glance,

The extension of shiny, light auburn thread

With an addition of coffee-tainted conviction

Triggered my cranium to blossom,

And my five senses

To rise light years of levels

That even I am still clueless to this day.

At a second glance, and many glances after,

I travel back to that beginning memory

Of that significant, debuting day

When I saw the first grace of promenade

With light auburn thread

And coffee-tainted conviction

Author's Note

Thank you for reading and reviewing, this is awesome~

Reviews

[Érenn]

Rings of something that took place in the past. Your words here have many layers and definitely the depth of writing is clearly visible. An emotional attachment or a very good memory perhaps? Great use of words to give a vivid imagery. Loved the way you presented this. I liked it a lot ^^

[Yurie Lee]

Yes, it was definitely a good memory, haha~

[Bear]

Bravo! There are times when a work of literature reaches out and touches me and there is nothing I can say that would truly express how it moved me so I can only give a Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Yurie Lee]

Awwww thank you, thank you~ *bows with a hand flutter thingy gesture*

[Bear]

Ha!Ha!Ha! And I curtsey back :~)

[Nizar]

i really looooooooooooooove it , i love your style of writing and it has alot of meanings ^^ Good job

[Yurie Lee]

Thank you so much~ I am so happy to hear my writing style is loved~

[Nizar]

I appreciate it so much !

[Rowen]

This poem is one of the best I've ever read! The first part got me hooked ;)

[Yurie Lee]

Awww thanks so much~

[Rowen]

You're welcome :)

[Sora The Egotistical]

From what I can tell it seems to be about something seeming too good to be true, but then I guess turning out to be true after all. Possibly a life changing memory you look back to fondly? At least that's what I get from it. Good use of imagery and figurative language here, though maybe you could have expanded some of it more and used more unique word choice. It's pretty vague, but it's the right length for something like that and can lead to many interpretations. So all in all, good work, especially for being 14 at the time.

(P.S. it would be "I've become" not "I've became", just saying...)

[Yurie Lee]

YES~! About time someone gave me constructive criticism! Thank you so much~!

[Sora The Egotistical]

Haha no problem! Send me a read request of whatever else you'd like some on

[zunie frost]

Great poetry ! Nicely written
real em0tions and beauty .well done

[Yurie Lee]

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww~ Thanks~

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the words.
"At first glance,
I almost thought I had a glorious trance,
But then I have come to realize
My eyes perceived a realm of honesty
And truthful beauty
Beyond any imagination and mankind."
The above lines took the reader to place and thoughts. A good place. A strong ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[VP]

Wow I love your poem... Its flawless...

[Yurie Lee]

Thanks so much~!

[justdandy]

"The extension of shiny, light auburn thread
With an addition of coffee-tainted conviction" - I love coffee so much, and when I read this I just smiled. I could totally picture that in my head.

[Yurie Lee]

Haha I love coffee too~ And I work at a coffee shop, so it's even better~ :D

[justdandy]

Well, that is pure luck.

[ghostlyhearts]

Very beautiful. That first line really pulled me in.

[Yurie Lee]

Awww thanks~ ^^

[ghostlyhearts]

You are welcome!