The Black Phoenix
A Book by Yurie Lee
 “Who's Scarlett?”
“The rose in my hair. She turned out so beautiful. I wish I could be as perfect as her."
Hideo scrunched his eyebrows. “Why are you comparing yourself to a flower?"  © 2016 Yurie Lee
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This is only the first two chapters since this story is rather long, sooo~ Otherwise, tell me what you think, even if it is rather harsh. I appreciate honesty~ Thank you~
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Wow! I seriously want to read more. I find each and every sentence you write so meaningful and engaging. You have done such a good job on this! I love the use of vocabulary, I simply couldn't find any mistakes.
100/100 to me :)
Please, when you get the time, check out my stories? They're not as good as yours, but I would appreciate any feedback at all.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Kind of late, so sorry~! But thank you so much~!
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brave work done by u.... it hits a lot of meaning in each word .... appreciate ur writing...:)
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Wow~! So late, but thank you so much~!
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Wow! I seriously want to read more. I find each and every sentence you write so meaningful and engaging. You have done such a good job on this! I love the use of vocabulary, I simply couldn't find any mistakes.
100/100 to me :)
Please, when you get the time, check out my stories? They're not as good as yours, but I would appreciate any feedback at all.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Kind of late, so sorry~! But thank you so much~!
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I cant wait for chapter 5.:D
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much for anticipating~! This warms my heart sooo much~! :D
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I like it. It is interesting and intriguing. I saw the first chapter as a kind of prologue, so I think it is ok to make it shorter than the others. I will be very interested in seeing where this goes.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, your comment means so much to me~! I'm glad you're interested to see how it goes~
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To begin this I will tell you that you've got a very interesting idea here and unique. You are very brave for daring to write this, I wouldn't. Of every aspect one must work with in a fantasy world religion is the most difficult, in my opinion. I don't even mention it. As for the chapters I think it would be better if you made them all even, not exactly the same number of words each, I do mine between 4000 and 5000 words. But the reader sometimes feels cheated when you give them a short chapter and then a longer one, it's like watching only half of you favorite tv show.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your wonderful comments and criticism~ I will take all of it into heart~ :D
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Yurie Lee
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Hey, I'm a 20-year-old who likes to write here and there.
I haven't enjoyed writing much, and today after a long while, I finally had a break through. It made me really happy, as I have recently l.. more..
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