If you see her!

hey!if you see her

tell her i miss her

tell her i love her

im crazy about her

you are crazy about her?

psshh! i know

she is perfect 

i know!

when she took off 

she took my heart with her

"with her?"

yes whit her!

i kiss her last night

"you kiss her in silent!"

i hug her last night

"you hug her in silent!"

i know what you mean

"but she was not whit you"

she is far away yet close

"and the ocean is in between"

but the fire burn!

"the wind whisper her name!"

my mind want her!

"this fire still burn in the winter!"

hey!if you see her

tell her i miss her

i do love her

and she the only queen for this castle

Reviews

[Tia Sanchez]

Aww, clever and very sweet! I love this.

[J.Black]

I agree with [M]ZiZK-Kazz., I noticed you say "whit" instead of "with". - which is okay! Everyone can't be an expert at English. There are other forms of languages out there. Very nice tone, lol! IT is about two people having a conversation with one another, perhaps maybe even you and a friend? You're good. Keep it up.

[[KL]]

This seems to be a conversation between two people, whilst being a poem, correct? That is very clever, I must say. I would never have thought of that, honestly. I notice you say "whit" instead of "with".. Is this intentional? Either way, a solid piece. Very well written, well done. Thank you for sharing.
[M]