You're Still Gone

Together we stand,

Making up the snow-white abyss.

Our souls, alike, become one.

Then I realize how only a memory is this.

And how the love I once felt is gone.

 

Alone now, only I stand,

The painful nothingness that surrounds.

My soul and body seem forever apart...

Consciousness returns-and so I remember...

What has brought me here from the start.

 

If only I could see you one las time...

In presence, apart fom only in mind.

With helpless hope I search again.

Though I know nothing is all I will find;

No life is left; my existance seems dead.

 

Maybe the memories of you that are in my heart

Are enough to keep me strong...

But when I realize, in the world around me, you're gone,

I break down...I just can't go along...

I suffer when I let myself know we're really apart.

 

Day apon night I continue to endure this...

Sometimes I wonder if you too can't bare,

Or if the white-abyss finds you as well.

Would you too have been there?

Is this pain something we share?

 

I force myself back to happiness;

Into the wonderful, safe abyss.

Yet this time when I begin to dream...

I see the truth I needn't to miss;

And I just can't make true this wish.

Reviews

[Sarah J Dhue]

great, well crafted. i felt something, it reminded me of a situation i experienced once...

[Clockwork]

I like the overall flow of the piece. I think that it is nearly song like in a way. Great way of sharing a universal message that many can relate to.

[ruth]

i really love this poem and i can relate to it..
i love the emotion in your poem. i felt it..
and also the rhyming..
-ruth

[Masq]

~~~~~ ((( Applause))) ~~~~~

"Maybe the memories of you that are in my heart
Are enough to keep me strong...
But when I realize, in the world around me, you're gone,
I break down...I just can't go along...
I suffer when I let myself know we're really apart."

Very heartfelt and touching write. I think you did a wonderful job of expressing your innermost feelings.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is really something amazing... the raw sting of heartache is overwhelming... great expression of emotions.