Do you see me

Do you see me

A Poem by Young_writer98
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i feel that im not noticed. i want to be known.

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Do you see me
Hiding behind this mask
Do you see me
I know you'll never ask
Do you see me
When i cry myself to sleep
Do you see me
I never say a peep
Do you see me
Sulking in the shadows
Do you see me
No one ever knows
Do you see me
Drowning in my own sorrow
Do you see me
Will i see the light of tomorrow
Do you see me
Trying to find the light
Do you see me
Suffocated by the night
Do you see me
Fighting my own battle
Do you see me
My chains shall never rattle
Do you see me
Trying to break free
Do you see me 
Will i ever find the key
Do you see me

© 2012 Young_writer98


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My only criticisms are that it's kinda repetitive...although I know this is kind of the point so it could just count as part of the impact, ad the line I never say a peep...sounds a bit odd...I mean, do people say a peep? I don't quite know...
Otherwise the rhyming scheme is sound and the message behind it is clear =]
I hope you get seen :L

Posted 12 Years Ago


Young_writer98

12 Years Ago

i am a beginner and i will soon upload more of my poems

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I have just recently have come accustomed to poetry. I like the way that i can express my feelings. I have been through hard times so most of my poems are about sorrow or grief but im working on happi.. more..

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