Waiting

A patient hand brushes her hair,

Blonde, and soft; wavy and fair.

 

A patient pair of eyes stare out of the tower,

While they do, they catch a midsummer shower.

 

A patient voice sings an old tune,

About when the Sun met the Earth, and the Earth met the moon.

 

A patient mouth eats the same old food,

Because if she didn't, she would seem dreadfully rude.

 

Then the patient eyes watch the sun go down,

Another day has passed, and so she frowns.

 

Her patient legs crawl into bed,

And on her silk pillow she rests her patient head.

 

But when the sun comes up she says out loud,

"I'm so tired of waiting and watching the clouds.

 

"I'm so tired of thinking that he will come soon,

And singing that song of the Earth, Sun, and Moon.

 

"And damn-- am I tired of not breathing fresh air!

To hell with my prince, I am so out of here."

Author's Note

Anyone guess it was Rapunzel?

Reviews

[Anna a. S.M.]

Wow, I like this poem very much!
Yes, for I moment I thought about Rapunzel^^

[Nova]

So cute! I didn't think it was Rapunzel but I thought it was one of those princesses stuck in a tower allusion. Short and sweet. Thank you for sharing.

[eighwoeifj]

Wonderful. To be honest, I read the reviews, so I knew what to expect, but it was still a good read!

[Collette Paige]

Wonderful. I did not think it was repunzel, in my mind it was a normal lonely girl XD
But I am in love with this. You did a spectacular job and, unlike who knows how people on this site, I really truly think this is one of your bests. I will not lie and say everything you do is the best, that would be horrid. So I truly mean that this is beautiful.

[Hayley]

Hahaha. No, I didn't but reading it again I definitely see that! This was really well written. I really enjoyed the read. I like the reuse of the word 'patient'

[Ian Faraway]

What's weird is that I didn't even realize that the lines rhymed until the last stanza. SO it wasn't forced and I like the rhythm of the poem and pace and tone. Not much for fairy tales but I enjoyed this.