Her Escape

Her Escape

A Poem by Viki Rachel
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A woman, who is alone and sad, paints to escape the small box of a house she knows she will never call home.

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The paintbrush has seen better days,

And she has too,

But the world is asleep,

And she's feeling quite blue.

 

So she picks up her paintbrush and dips it in green,

And proceeds to paint landscapes that her eyes have never seen.

 

A beach, with white sands,

Like the color of her face,

The sea,

So full of fierceness and grace.

 

A desert, with a bird,

That flies as high as a kite,

And it never looks down,

Because its fear is not height.

 

Then a small cottage,

In a field so green,

And the love in that field,

Is something she's never felt,

Or seen.

 

Now the painting is done,

To many, it makes no sense,

But to all of those people,

This girl is not dense.

 

In her box of a house,

With one friend,

Just a mouse,

She's isolated and alone,

And she still is not at home.

© 2010 Viki Rachel


Author's Note

Viki Rachel
This poem, in case you didn't catch it, is about a woman who's never been loved, and she's always been alone, so she paints to escape all of that sadness and desperation.

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I love the visuals that this poem brings up with the painting. It's quite breath taking and lovely. It's wrinkled with sadness of a woman so lonely but at least she has all of her imagination to keep her company. This is a great rhyme and I love rhyming poems most of all. Great write. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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A beautiful yet sad portrayal of the art of escape. You brought to life the artist who creates to escape their life dramatically and vibrantly. A colourful piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Art is often created out of pain or longing. Perhaps the best, most moving art evolves this way, in fact. This one conjurs sweet visuals and leaves a poignant taste in the mouth.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I really loved this one all the powerful emotion in this. Amazing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing, this poem means a lot to me. In a way, it paints the imagery right in front of my eyes. Anyone who can do that, definitely deserves an award!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

how sad to not have known a moment of love...

nice work on this poem...

Posted 14 Years Ago


I have to say, I was caught as soon as I red it ^_^
You did a great job of describing while still keeping it rhyming.
Though, there are some words that coul've been repalced with even more vivid words. Other than that, I love it and you did great. I look forward to more

Posted 14 Years Ago


Yes, your visuals and metaphors are there, subtle but there. You have a great talent.
~lovely

Posted 14 Years Ago


As I was reading this, I was thinking of what it was like to have someone, but feel so lonely, as though you are alone with someone inn the room. What an absolutely masterful write!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You paint a powerful portrait of desolation here-- the images are haunting. Atmospheric write-- well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I absolutely love this. It's very beautifully written. A creative and unique piece with a great imagery. Wonderful.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Viki Rachel
Viki Rachel

Dallas, TX



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