Scars Full Of Gold

A new piece I wrote this week

I believe in your victory
because It's the only way out of this mess we've created.
Stuck in a barrel of emptiness and fueled by despair,
I can no longer have you living here.
You're an outsider disguised as a jailbreak
a destruction of myself

When its all said and done-
what of this will be saved.
Lost like the coastline in a haze of fog,
the secrets of this path
will dissolve into nothing.

Forever fumbling towards a life that was never there-
can we get back to today, while forgetting yesterday and not living for tomorrow?
or will you shoulder it like the crashing of heavy waves
eager to show your strength,
when your eyes concede
that everything is broken

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Outstanding. It ain't great but it is very true... which makes it more than that.

[Ashesh]

you realize that there is no place for hurtful love, love that was never there-- which looked seemingly true. this is sad but a phase of revival and moving on with life. the scars will just remain as mark later and that would not hurt you my dear friend. this is relatable emotion to me. thanks for sharing. awesome write!

[Seashell]

So sad...I feel the pain. Strength is innevitable to get over such a thing, I guess...oh and faith...faith in a pot of gold at the end of the rainbow.
Sometimes things turn out even better than one could ever imagine.

Beautifully written

Thanks for share
Babs x

[Don't find me]

forever fumbling. i always like alliteration. also like the image of the coastline. cool.

[Adelia Alighieri]

You created a wonderful imagery in this poem.
Well done.

[emmajoy]

I takes real courage to put these emotions on view, and, it takes courage to face the thoughts that birthed them. When relationships, friendships, lose heart maybe the best thing to do is to stand back to back and walk away, to let go; it hurts, hurts so much but when the light begins to flicker out .. that's it .. tragically.

This is a sadly beautiful poem.

[Brad]

whoah, man, that's dedication...bleeding for others has always been it for me...nicely put

[Immortal1967]

great job on this. Relationships of any kind are hard, and even when someone fights for it, it doesn't always save the relationship...love the last line "when your eyes concede, that everything is broken"

[Ed Hart]

oh paul, this is wonderful...even the content, because to get to here you have to have summoned the depths of your courage and faith, and be willing to let everything go...that's a long way from both shores

[Robin]

perfect title , insightful , reflective poetry of the paths that lead us to where and what we are - now