Wake Up

A metaphor for relationships, the transparency of life, or just fun with words?

 Wake Up

So you’re sleeping and you’re breathing deeply

Dreaming seems to be completely

Free beneath the sheets you neatly

Squeeze between your feet you see me

Seething - I’m green with envy

Beaten - I’m feeling empty

Meant to vent pretentious energy

Ten percent depends on lethargy

Sent to gently dent your memory

Let’s pretend I’m less competitive

Anyway - you’re letting me settle this

In a way - you’re getting the benefits

Whether or not / it’s better forgot

You never can stop / the veteran’s plot

It’s very upsetting to bet if you’re lost

Remember vendettas forgetting the cost

Of Honesty - you’re learning to serve

Ferocity - it’s burning the earth,

Preferring to nurture the curse of the church

Referring to murders of persons of worth

Inferring that further deference is worse

Deterring occurrence of purposeful birth

Firstly - too nervous for words

Conversely - they’re perfectly served.

Bursting the limits of mirth is imminent

Curving the will of the verse is infinite

Sitting considering riddles and synonyms

Intricate symbols of intimate simpletons

Gentlemen - they’re trying to hide

Impotent - no fire inside

Blind to kindness kind of stifling

Try defining the lie - it’s trifling

Finding that kind of excitement expired

Inquire as to why all this spite is required?

WAKE UP WAKE UP WAKE UP PLEASE

WAKE UP WAKE UP WAKE UP

WAKE UP WAKE UP WAKE UP PLEASE

WAKE UP WAKE UP WAKE UP

Author's Note

Part of a larger project, but this snippet gives you an idea. If you're gonna mistreat it, beat it.

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

Well anyways this was a brilliant poem in a way.. :) using your words to complimemnt you. Really this was a great piece- you have gone to the depth of meaning of each word"gentleman- trying to hide,impotent- no fire inside.. " hah! Your sarcasm knows no bounds.. well written piece

~Sophy

[Christopher Robin]

Thanks again for the kind words Sophy, what you say is true - I do find it hard to keep a lid on the sarcasm, ha!
I hope you enjoy the rest of my work, I look forward to viewing yours.

-Robin

[Sophy Freebirds]

I do enjoy it! I am eager to read your work.. :) was a pleasure

[Kerra]

WOW!! Love this write, such depth in this write. Enjoyed reading this

[Moonie]

I can't be the only one who read this as though it was spoken in fast forward. Really, now, I love the pace of this piece!
Well done! Cheers! :))

[hardeep sabharwal]

that was very well done, its enjoyable read here,
thankyou :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

that was very well done, its enjoyable read here,
thankyou :)

[Kat Leila]

Very lovely! I enjoyed reading this....

[realmwriter]

I must say sir, that you have penned a fast paced snippet that was a pleasure to read. You get right to it and you hold the reader ins suspense. You use the very definition of every word to the best of your ability and play with each line. Rhythm, rhyme, flow, flawless. Grammar however... well it needs some commas toward the end lines and I find the font and size a bit taxing on the eyes. None the less, very good.

[Lotus Flower]

I love the flow of this poem and the meaning behind it. Great job :)

[stars are far]

that was very well done, i loved this work.. keep on goin :)

[Revolutionary]

crazy words intetwined into a tongue twisting carnival.I would wake up and listen if I were there

[Briana O'Connor]

Lol I love you author's note. I also loved your poem. The way you rhymed so many phrases together was entrancing. I was mesmerized by this one. The emotions are deep and worth feeling. You delivered a message loud and clear. Thank you for sharing.