When You...

When you become something they tread on...

When you give away your heart
They will strive to tear it apart
When you try to give it your all
They will want to see you fall
When you rise from the ashes
On your back, you'll find their scratches
When you try to give them help
They will urge to hear you yelp
When you call them your dear friends
They will force you to dark dead ends...

Author's Note

Something that I feel that is going on in my life, but I don't know why...

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Vicky,

Sounds like you are going through a rough time. Sometimes you just have to clean yourself off. Mend the wounds, and move on. I do wish this wasn't occuring to you as I know how it feels to have the world ganged up against you. I hope in the end you will rise above it all.

Regards,

Matthew

[Ray]

Umm..... I know how this feels.... peer pressure.... caring for something so much then you lose it.... such pain

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. hmmm ... be cautious ... it's for a reason that the wise often say that we should be very discerning ... it is very easy to fall into the trap of someone pretending to be a best friend ... i have walked into it many times ... and i have seen a lot of people walk into it many times ... i'm glad you wrote this poem ... especially for those who are unable to identify the trap ... very well written ...

[A.A.Romanczuk]

beautiful..complex in its simplicity...sometimes the ones we think are closest to us...strive to destroy us....You've captured that beautifully

[Abigail T]

So simple and so honest. I can really feel where you're coming from in this one. Also, great rhymes!

[Tomi]

I like the rhyme, short and direct. Guess you need to do good simply for oneself, not to please anyone.

[luciddreamer]

I feel the pain of this one...really good write :)
Peace
Robin

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

sometimes the influences around us are definetly not to our benefit~ it gets complicated especially when they are ones you consider to be friends~ you relate this very well in your poem~