a stolen kiss

sense&sensibility

you spun around, the soft fabric flowing 

innocence glistened in your eye 

you took my breath away, I could hardly bare looking at you 

your smile made my heart stop 

lost for words I walked you through the rooms, the shawl wrapped around your soft white shoulders 

so I stole a kiss from virgin lips, and doomed us both for all time

Reviews

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Wow, this is intense. You take the reader on this adventure--which most of us have been through-- and at first, it seems loving and innocent(calm before storm). But at the end, the clouds begin to rise when you stole "a kiss from virgin lips". Great job :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is a wonderful piece. Short but packed with visual clues and emotion and the final line is like Thor's hammer

[Yheela]

Thank you, I'm glad you like it.

[zainul]

Presented a vivid piece of a movie where the stealing takes place in such artistic way.
Enjoyed the decent work .

[Yheela]

Thank you. Most appreciated.

[zainul]

You are welcome,decent poetess.

[zainul]

I tried to figure out your "virgin time".
How you looked then?
Your profile photo looks younger than your current age.
You can demystify (!) if you wish.

[Yheela]

My photo is actually very recent! :D
But I'll look through my pics and see if I can find one from "way back when". :)

[zainul]

I think you are quite blessed and green.
I will love to explore the beauty of your virgin time.

[lee von cleef]

Doomed for a life time and then some, No "Drive ins" any more I don't know where any one learns to kiss today.

[Yheela]

Maybe we need to rediscover the magic of a simple, "innocent" kiss?

[James Wymore]

Wow!

[Yheela]

Thanks. ^_^

[Chris]

you're or your?

I liked the thought within your flow... and at the end the possibility of twists or just continuing along exists.

[Yheela]

Thanks, missed that typo.

[Eloha]

This is epic! I wish I still had that emotional range....I'm not sure where it went with age.

[Yheela]

Must have given up on you and jumped ship to some new exotic land.
Thank you for the "epic", am rather proud myself. ^_^

[Eloha]

Maybe I haven't quite done as much kissing in this lifetime, as I had originally planned.

[Yheela]

There's time for kissing yet, I'm sure.

[Eloha]

heck give me a woman who needs my kisses, i'm sure I could do a good job.

[Yheela]

That's the spirit! XD

[Eloha]

Yes but for a lad like me, it's all about being needed.

[Yheela]

Being needed *is* a nice, no wonderful, feeling.

[Eloha]

Can I do your birthchart?

[Yheela]

Yes, you can.

[Eloha]

So can you PM me your birthday details, like time of day and place and d/m/y, then I can tell you fancy stuff.

[Yina]

Slightly creepy yet so beautiful! I love human beings' innocence:)

[Yheela]

Thank you, it's inspired by Marianne and Willoughby - so you're right about the creepy and innocent part. He's the creep btw. ^_^

[Yina]

Oooo it just got creepier lol

[Yheela]

LOL - yeah, they've made this new adaptation (of S&S) where they show them at his aunt's house. Brilliant piece of filming.

[Yina]

Honestly, I don't know Marianne and Willoughby..

[Yheela]

Then read Jane Austen's novel Sense & Sensibility, or see the film. ;-)

[Yina]

Alright!:)