a stolen kiss

a stolen kiss

A Poem by Yheela
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sense&sensibility

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you spun around, the soft fabric flowing 

innocence glistened in your eye 

you took my breath away, I could hardly bare looking at you 

your smile made my heart stop 

lost for words I walked you through the rooms, the shawl wrapped around your soft white shoulders 

so I stole a kiss from virgin lips, and doomed us both for all time

© 2012 Yheela


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Wow, this is intense. You take the reader on this adventure--which most of us have been through-- and at first, it seems loving and innocent(calm before storm). But at the end, the clouds begin to rise when you stole "a kiss from virgin lips". Great job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a wonderful piece. Short but packed with visual clues and emotion and the final line is like Thor's hammer

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yheela

12 Years Ago

Thank you, I'm glad you like it.
Presented a vivid piece of a movie where the stealing takes place in such artistic way.
Enjoyed the decent work .

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

I tried to figure out your "virgin time".
How you looked then?
Your profile photo look.. read more
Yheela

12 Years Ago

My photo is actually very recent! :D
But I'll look through my pics and see if I can find one .. read more
zainul

12 Years Ago

I think you are quite blessed and green.
I will love to explore the beauty of your virgin ti.. read more
Doomed for a life time and then some, No "Drive ins" any more I don't know where any one learns to kiss today.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yheela

12 Years Ago

Maybe we need to rediscover the magic of a simple, "innocent" kiss?
Wow!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yheela

12 Years Ago

Thanks. ^_^
you're or your?

I liked the thought within your flow... and at the end the possibility of twists or just continuing along exists.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yheela

12 Years Ago

Thanks, missed that typo.
This is epic! I wish I still had that emotional range....I'm not sure where it went with age.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Eloha

12 Years Ago

Can I do your birthchart?
Yheela

12 Years Ago

Yes, you can.
Eloha

12 Years Ago

So can you PM me your birthday details, like time of day and place and d/m/y, then I can tell you fa.. read more
Slightly creepy yet so beautiful! I love human beings' innocence:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yina

12 Years Ago

Honestly, I don't know Marianne and Willoughby..
Yheela

12 Years Ago

Then read Jane Austen's novel Sense & Sensibility, or see the film. ;-)
Yina

12 Years Ago

Alright!:)

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Added on August 2, 2012
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Yheela
Yheela

Gotene, Sweden



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