You

its about my special someone

When i think of you all i do is pour tears,

Fears that you will leave or cheat,

 

Lies surrounding me saying your not right or good,

I slowly start to die without your love all around me,

 

In the pain i feel while you aren't here,

Your love is stain covering every part of me,

 

You make me see truth and good  in all thats happening to you,

I take you and hold you close when i have you,

 

You mean the world to me,

No, you are my world my everything

 

My love:)

Author's Note

this isn't as good as it should be, but its as good as i want it, he would love it the way it is.

Reviews

[Diasha]

I love it :D!!
I can completely relate to your poem!
I always believe the most important part of a writing
is the emotion you convey.

GOOD JOB ☺

[Muse]

such a pretty heart-felt write. :)

[Hannah Hartless]

inresting

[G!o]

I found this sweet and straight. It is a writing that the person this is writen to, wouldn't have to struggle to read between the lines to understand. It is a simple but a strong writing. Fact that you managed to put the right ideas at the right place, makes it lovely. Piece of advice though, when you post your work don't state doubt on it like saying, you don't think it's all that. It kind of robs the reader the thrill. Take pride in your work even if you don't think it's your best. Anyway, keep writing Jess. I enjoyed this.

[G!o]

I found this sweet and straight. It is a writing that the person this is writen to, wouldn't have to struggle to read between the lines to understand. It is a simple but a strong writing. Fact that you managed to put the right ideas at the right place, makes it lovely. Piece of advice though, when you post your work don't state doubt on it like saying, you don't think it's all that. It kind of robs the reader the thrill. Take pride in your work even if you don't think it's your best. Anyway, keep writing Jess. I enjoyed this.

[L.G. Knight]

I thought it powerful in how it written and wonderfully sweet. Not all poetry is better if grammaticaly correct or overly done. Sometimes less is more and improvements can detract from the message. Wise choice to leave it as is for it captured me just the way it is. Nicely done!

[Brianna Van Zandt]

The way you have written this triggers an emotional response. The way you wrote it and your Author's Note evokes a powerful emotion and you have given us the chance to feel what you felt when you wrote his, perhaps. Wonderful.

[Leigh]

You have put how you feel simply and directly and it has worked very well in conveying it to the reader. Beautiful write

[.]

This is so true! Briliant poetry this is! Wonderful! 100/100

[I'm Just me:)]

aww thank you so much!!!

[.]

You're welcome! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. Love can take us to new levels in thoughts and actions. I like the kind and hopeful feel of the amazing poem of love.
Coyote

[I'm Just me:)]

well its true he has very weird and tuff life but he pulls through for me, and i get to help him through it cuz i love him, and he is worth it