this poem describe how music impacts on our lives on a small or larger scale. it explains how music is important to relive mental health along with it, it helps us to express ourselves.
The melodies flow in the unseen air,
Pleasants the soul inside of me.
The music whispers in my ears,
All the dilemma in living disappears.
Glee or distress,
It helps in every emotion.
The feeling of satisfaction in every line of every verse.
I'm impressed that you're so into poetry at your age. Unfortunately, there are a few problems that are invisible to the hopeful author, who possesses things their reader lacks.
For you, who have intent guiding your understanding, there's context that the reader lacks, such as what prompted you to write it. So for you, who have full understanding BEFORE you begin reading, it works. And who fixes the problem they don't see as being a problem?
But the main thing that catches us is that we think that the skill we call writing is universal to all applications. But it's not. The only kind of writing that we're given in school is nonfiction, to prepare us for the needs of employment. Employers need us to write reports and letters, which are nonfiction, and meant to inform. Using those techniques we talk TO the reader, reporting and explaining. Great for reports, but useless if your goal is to entertain. That takes an emotion-based approach not even mentioned as existing in your classes.
But think about it. Professional skills are acquired IN ADDITION to the general skills of school, and they offer poetry related degree programs, so it make sense to dig into those skills. Right?
As an example of the things we all get wrong, your rhyming is all over the place, so far as structure and prosody, and you often bend the line to the needs of the rhyme. But rhyming is an accent, and the rhyming word should perfectly fit the thought, not be the focus of the line.
Try this: Jump over to Amazon and read the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. What he has to say about the flow of language, and prosody, will amaze you, and make a huge difference in your poetry.
For an actual first book on metrical poetry, though, I'd suggest Mary Oliver's, Rules For the Dance. And for non-metrical, her, A Poetry Handbook, is filled with gems.
So jump in. The more tools you own the more options you have. And, the more fun the writing becomes.
But whatever you do, hang in there and keep on writing.
Posted 5 Months Ago
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5 Months Ago
Thank you so much sir for telling me where i went wrong and i promise you that i will try to correct.. read moreThank you so much sir for telling me where i went wrong and i promise you that i will try to correct my mistakes in the future and give the readers best poems possible!!
I'm impressed that you're so into poetry at your age. Unfortunately, there are a few problems that are invisible to the hopeful author, who possesses things their reader lacks.
For you, who have intent guiding your understanding, there's context that the reader lacks, such as what prompted you to write it. So for you, who have full understanding BEFORE you begin reading, it works. And who fixes the problem they don't see as being a problem?
But the main thing that catches us is that we think that the skill we call writing is universal to all applications. But it's not. The only kind of writing that we're given in school is nonfiction, to prepare us for the needs of employment. Employers need us to write reports and letters, which are nonfiction, and meant to inform. Using those techniques we talk TO the reader, reporting and explaining. Great for reports, but useless if your goal is to entertain. That takes an emotion-based approach not even mentioned as existing in your classes.
But think about it. Professional skills are acquired IN ADDITION to the general skills of school, and they offer poetry related degree programs, so it make sense to dig into those skills. Right?
As an example of the things we all get wrong, your rhyming is all over the place, so far as structure and prosody, and you often bend the line to the needs of the rhyme. But rhyming is an accent, and the rhyming word should perfectly fit the thought, not be the focus of the line.
Try this: Jump over to Amazon and read the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. What he has to say about the flow of language, and prosody, will amaze you, and make a huge difference in your poetry.
For an actual first book on metrical poetry, though, I'd suggest Mary Oliver's, Rules For the Dance. And for non-metrical, her, A Poetry Handbook, is filled with gems.
So jump in. The more tools you own the more options you have. And, the more fun the writing becomes.
But whatever you do, hang in there and keep on writing.
Posted 5 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Months Ago
Thank you so much sir for telling me where i went wrong and i promise you that i will try to correct.. read moreThank you so much sir for telling me where i went wrong and i promise you that i will try to correct my mistakes in the future and give the readers best poems possible!!
Hello everyone i am Riya Joshi, a 14 year old poet a co-author of 6 books and 1 magazines and with over 30 poems written in Marathi and English. I am looking forward to joining u guys in the poetry co.. more..