STARDUST

Lightening struck the timeless primordial tree,

From his stardust I emerged, and onto dust we turn,

Born out of a color, tuned onto a seed,

Behold the grace of his delicate brush,

The palette is his, for you and I are heaven's deed,

Your crude conceit dims the radiance of the beam,

When your pride stains his canvas of a thousand shades,

And you bleed his light when you ash another's dream.

A symphony so sweet to a soul so prudent,

No major or minor exist in his harmonious melody,

Yet when the light is bled, the soul is mutant,

He grants the keys if his grace beseeched,

And the song is hummed in every corner walked, 

For the walk is his and the keys must lead,

To the eternal gate, and in you, its path is traced.

The seed is yours for his land to sow,

His tree must grow for his time to flow, 

Behold the color from losing its shade,

For heaven is made for those who know.

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

a stunning poem, so eternal in its context; showing a seed born of primordial tree which will continue to produce….but jthere is more, showing the path to heave’s gate, the light and dark, the colors of his palette, the elegant songs…..the keys to his gate….he is the one who finds your path…..
so many beautiful words and their intricate meanings…. this quite an amazing work…..
Warmly, B🌷🌷🌷🌷🌷

[Yahya Oulad Aouid]

Dear Mrs. Hermelee

Your words of encouragement and appreciation are beyond flattering, and if there is one reason to continue writing whatever the heart dictates, it is to reach gentle poetic hearts like yours. My scribbles are nothing but the mean, not the end.
Thank you for your warm message, B!!

Kind regards,

[Betty Hermelee]

You are very welcome
Happy New Year!
Warmly, B

[Yahya Oulad Aouid]

Happy New Year Mrs. Hermelee!

[Betty Hermelee]

call me Betty😊

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it's beautiful and inspiring. i have never been to Morocco but i have heard about her natural beauty. and your words paint such a delightful picture. but it's more than that. "His tree must grow for his time to flow," is such a captivating line. like all things in nature, we too must look up and reach for the stars. the final line was magnificent. "For heaven is made for those who know." I'm not sure I do, but I think i am getting close.

[LisaCarol]

Beautifully written with a prudent message. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[MCS]

What an elegant piece of writing dear poet.
Profound words that demand the read take note.
This read like a prayer and should be followed with an amen.
Well done!

[Amy R]

This poem revolves around the interconnectedness of existence, creation, and the divine. It explores themes of identity, spirituality, and the relationship between humanity and a higher power, symbolized through the imagery of a primordial tree and stardust.

Your poem is laden with visual descriptions, creating a sense of beauty and depth.

I ENJOYED THIS POEM SO MUCH. Thank you for sharing it with us all.
-Amy

[Yahya Oulad Aouid]

Dear Amy,

I am sorry for the late reply. Your review could not have been more accurate to the interweb of themes related to the human condition I wanted to portray through this modest poem. I appreciate your critical insight and profound poetic sense as demonstrated in this wonderful review, and I am really glad my work resonates with you!
Thank you for passing by!

-Yahya

[Amy R]

You're very welcome,
Have a Happy New Year🙏🏻🤗

[Yahya Oulad Aouid]

Happy new year to you as well, Amy!

[Amy R]

Thanks., keep good poet