underneath my umbrella
i hide
from the rain that's attacking
splash splash
from the wind that's screaming
woo woo
from the wrath of the angered sky
thump thump
or perhaps
i simply hide
from the faces in the street
and the mirrors i might meet
Awesome use of "umbrella" in this poem. We often read poems that speak only to the mind and body's protective covers, not something external we can hold, turn, re-position, open and close. It works well in this poem. I also like the "mirrors" reference at the end, suggesting it's not just the struggles outside our body that we face. Impressive work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Wow, thank you so much, Robert!
I didn't want this poem to be too long, sometimes les.. read moreWow, thank you so much, Robert!
I didn't want this poem to be too long, sometimes less is more!
Awesome use of "umbrella" in this poem. We often read poems that speak only to the mind and body's protective covers, not something external we can hold, turn, re-position, open and close. It works well in this poem. I also like the "mirrors" reference at the end, suggesting it's not just the struggles outside our body that we face. Impressive work.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Wow, thank you so much, Robert!
I didn't want this poem to be too long, sometimes les.. read moreWow, thank you so much, Robert!
I didn't want this poem to be too long, sometimes less is more!