Caged

Love Mama like you Love me

Daddy she is worthy
please give her your love
Daddy she misses you
so touch her
it won't hurt

Mama dies
when you ignore her cries
She loves you so much
so please give her your love

Daddy don't hurt her
she was just doing what you please
Daddy look at her
little by little,
she's going to start hating me

Mama's like a trapped bird
she has nowhere to escape too
why is it me daddy
that you love more?

Caged like a bird
I follow your every whim
Mama,
I don't know why
you want a demon like him
 
Daddy, please love her like you love me
Please Daddy ,
I beg you let me free....

Author's Note

Review!! Tell me what you think. Do you like it. and what should I change or add to make it better?

Reviews

[OceanTropic]

I liked it.

What strikes me more is not that the mother is abused, but rather that the child is asking why he doesn't love her like he has to. The child notices the lack of love even though what she is used to is seeing all this abuse at home, and I think that makes the story more deep.

Good piece. Keep writing!

[manifesto]

This has a deep message, strong story and lovely wording, and I love the last line. All in all, another beautiful work of art!

[YouoweYoupay]

It does bring out lonliness, and the picture fits very well. A heartbreaking and dark combination. Nicely written.

I think you're on a roll here. This brings out a lonliness. Awesome work!

[just is]

Wow this i sheart tugging, Well expressed emotions.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

this is devastating in its telling within the voice of innocence~ very effective~ deeply moving and haunting~

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Oh, it`s so strong and affect on me! I love the order of lines..and the feeling, sounds like a sad song...Great!