Ashes

Ashes

A Poem by Blossom

good girl drowns,
in within
the monster comes out
taking all that she is
Insecure,
she hides
watching as the monster destroys
her life,
her friends…
world starts crumbling
it starts to fade
until nothing is left but ashes

© 2010 Blossom


Author's Note

Blossom
Please Review
Tell me what you think. I know its short, but should it expand or leave it as it is?

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Leave it as it is! The shortness and simplicity makes the message even stronger.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the whole idea behind the poem. Well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this could be continued i think but end it in "until nothing is left but ashes" :> Relatable. .





Posted 13 Years Ago


deeply engaging poetic~ speaks of the dual nature in us all and our double edged capacity to either nourish or destroy~ very well done!~

Posted 14 Years Ago


Interesting. I like it. For the moment you feel as nothing more than ashes blowing in the wind. Nice job keep it up!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really like it... it blossoms in simplicity :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I think you should do what you like to! It is great now!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on October 24, 2010
Last Updated on November 5, 2010
Tags: drowning, bad, girl, friends, ashes

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Blossom
Blossom

Saskatoon, Saskatchewan, Canada



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Love to read and write enjoy almost everything love chocolate mostly write dark poetry but really I'm a really outgoing and hyper child. Weird... I know! Lets101 Quizzes - Online Quizzes Le.. more..

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