Color Blind

Refusing to look back at what could've been. Or even rethinking of different scenarios to change the unchangeable in this prehistoric situation is overly tempting but why ruin everything for this one moment?
Can't you just enjoy the time we have left to act careless and free before actually setting our foots in front of the door?
I'm not feeling regretful, that's not the reason for my absence...

I thought you were beautiful from the start but your beauty was drastically limited as a camouflage.

You never fully embraced yourself,
You're the definition of nonsense.
Yet, I love the hidden value behind your eyes.
Sadly, you refuse to lock them with mine.
You're constantly in denial for what you truly feel; creating a darkeness you've never felt stream within you boiling in righteousness.
Your beauty is vanishing and all I see is a hideous vow that's trailing along my side.


You know the saying, "you'll only see a person's true colors when things get real"...

Unfortunately, you never had color to begin with..

Reviews

[Armistead Lindsey]

What I love:
1. Intriguing use of differentiation with your lines
2. The use of a question in the first stanza engages your readers in a very personal way – I love it!
3. The final line is so strong! The way you have used and ellipsis makes me feel that there is a certain feeling of uncertainty that makes me question if there is a lingering of emotion despite there being a great deal of disdain to the addressee of the poem.

My quarrels:
1. Though I like the way you have differentiated your form, I feel that the first stanza can be incredibly hard to read and the flow feels slightly disjointed, especially with two sentences taking the first line.
2. The single lined second stanza feels like it should be two, it would strengthen the idea of beauty at the start.

Overall:
A beautifully emotive poem that I feel would be strengthened further by more scrutiny to the form.
Keep writing, I shall certainly keep reading.