My Butterfly Dream

To my friend

It is the spring

The only season I am going to live

The wild flowers,

Just like my splendid wings

 

Your shining eyes, project to the far away

I can feel the softness, just like the spring sun shine

See, I have ear

Talk to me, as if I am a butterfly

 

Your dreams like the sun, the moon, and the stars

The dance for you, decorating your spring

The oracle is of my life

One day as one journey.

Reviews

[YYH]

First, do poems have to follow the grammar? Maybe not always.
Second, I do want to follow the grammar. I do not detect error. Help me.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

No they do not need to follow any such rules.

No error per se, only a funny tense: read moreNo they do not need to follow any such rules.

No error per se, only a funny tense:

"Your shining eyes, project to the far away" (usually the 'the' would be omitted)

[YYH]

Woo. I see. You are right. Actually I am not sure about articles as always, as they do not exist in Chinese. Common problem for Chinese. Well, it is done. I would leave it like that.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I find the chin-glish actually quite cute! For instance:

"Your shining eyes, project to the far away"

I mean the grammar is imperfect, but it actually brings more power to keep it this way!

You are a good oracle, we have to watch the others! And the universe!