Out of My Planet

It is an interesting experience to express myself using poems. The twisted words disguise the feelings or the truth you wan to tell. I feel naughty, touchy, sensational, creative, gaming, and elegant.

I can see my planet from the earth

Where ivory is built into towers

My toys are classified by logic

The flowers boom on clock

 

The cities around me are chaotic

I see frogs jumping in the streets

Great entropy people give me

Like the sensations grow into me

 

No plans, no goals, no hope

Why should I stay on the earth?

The dangerous golden fruits

One bite made me lose the way home

Reviews

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

The first stanza is outstanding! Very good vocab too, "entropy", impressive!

This is your best piece yet. Highly intriguing. You are evolving as a poet in leaps and bounds!

It's not as twisted as you might suspect! You are tapping into existentialism here.