Through Cracked Glass

Just a poem I wrote >:P

Through cracked glass
Staring at the phone
Watching and waiting
Feeling so alone

Through cracked glass
He says "wanna come?
They'll be people and music
Come on, it'll be fun"

Through cracked glass
The music turns up
Dancing and partying
He fills up his cup

Through cracked glass
She says lets go
Feeling small and scared
He says "Just stay for the show:

Through cracked glass
Will she make it out alive?
He could barely walk
Let alone drive

Through cracked glass
He gets his keys
As he keeps going faster
Despite her pleas

Through cracked glass
Shes screams please stop
Faster and faster
We'll be stopped by the cops

Through cracked glass
We crash through a tree
With so much pain
She can no longer see

Through cracked glass
Everything goes black
How much time had passed?
She couldn't keep track

Through cracked glass
She opens her eyes
The wheels still spinning
It must just lies

Through cracked glass
Someone pulls her out
With a black bag to her side
She starts to shout

Through cracked glass
This isn't real
He can't be gone
He can heal

Through cracked glass
She dresses for the day
This time all black
She won't be okay

Through cracked glass
He's gone forever
So much to take in
They can't be together

Through cracked glass
She won't see him again
It's just no use
She can no longer pretend

Through cracked glass
She'll see him tonight
She can't live without him
It's to much of a fight

Author's Note

I'm just curious what everyone thinks(: Check out my other ones

Reviews

[Fabric Pulse]

To me what you give out is a dramatic play of ups and downs. What you want to make realized most is how much it hurts to lose someone who's standing right in front of you. It was a gripping spell cast. :)

[Tasha]

This was really good, and so sad. I loved the repetition of " Through Cracked Glass ". You did a really good job.

[-Scribe in Style-]

This is well written. I like the imagery of cracked glass.. It works really well. And the repetition with the sequence of events intensifies the feeling and impact of events. Overall, great job!

[WynterPhoenix]

The imagery is amazing in this. It's sad and you could feel all of the emotions put into. There was excitement, fear, sadness, anger, etc. Great write.

[Madds]

That's really good, sounds like on e that I wrote about my friends and I gettin ginto a carcrash - drunk driver(idiots)

[mjmccabe]

wow. that is a terrifying and powerful piece. so much body... its an amazing and tragic story. very, very well done.

[XxtaintedxX]

Thanks! >:D

[shoaib]

wow ... so much pain in here but it was written beautifully
great work and heart here

[Scisenheart]

another fantastic, teary, painful poem.

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Through cracked glass
She dresses for the day
This time all black
She won't be okay

WOW!! I so loved this stanza, SImply amazing write!!!
Loved the flow and rhyme scheme!