Star-Crossed

Bleh, Experimenting

 

 

Will we meet again,

As s       

    t    

     a 

      r

                  -    c r o s s e d

lovers do?

 Will you

C o m e  b a c k

 for me

          love,

And

s a v e  m e

from this

thickening       h  u  e  ?

We once    

                    heldhands             

As if we couldn’t

                   L

                    e

                     t  

  

                       g

                        o

Do you r e m e m b e r   

Your                   

Promises  ?          

You said you        

WOULDN’T         L e t  g o

But look now love...

You’ve

                                 G o n e  a w a y,

And you’ve left me

with

a promise.

That you will

come          back

to stay.

But will we really meet again,

Through this

Thickening   h u e ?

Will you                           

C o m e  b a c k

for me?

Will you

save me

As s       

    t    

     a 

      r

                  -    c r o s s e d

 

 

lovers do?

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Let me know..

Reviews

[paul]

you're a remarkable talent

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Creepy. Suffocating. Deep............

I LOVED IT!

[Arthur Crow]

Wow I really enjoyed this… the formatting is gorgeous and your lines rich with beautiful substance. The whole piece flows like silk. Thanks for sharing and I hope to read more of you soon!

[Prodigo]

haha, this is cool. I dig it

[Liza]

fun write
shows patience
insight

[Tate Morgan]

I like it I think I would do away with stretching the writing it makes it hard to read

[David W Moore III]

Well writ. Questioning loss. The format may be just a touch much but does give it a sense of misdirection like the subject of the poem.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Adora,

First, I love the poem as it is. However the format does take a bit of adjusting too. It may even take away from the poem a bit as I was following the words more than taking in the meaning.

The poem is fantastic, great flow, well thought out, but maybe too much thought out. The format does make me feel stars, I see the reference I just worry about it pulling away from the meaning. I really want to tell you it adds but it might be too much.

Always,

Matthew

[Dream Weaver]

I got dizzy reading this it was like running way too fast down the stairs...
Overall a very good write when my head stopped spinning and I got to read it :)