Meditation

Bleh

The exquisite hush,

Set by the endless oceans,

Laced in silver.

The bashful blush,

That set the skies in motion,

Making the sun wither.

The weightless kiss,

Of a blue breeze,

Waiting to erupt.

The ceaseless bliss,

Ending your dream,

Now...

Wake up.

Author's Note

Let Me know what you think :P

Reviews

[Prodigo]

Occasionally, there are phrases that are really really good but you seem to be inconsistent and it makes me assume these are all first drafts and unedited. Have you ever seen a faucet that drips water intermittently? Those dry spells are something to look out for in your writing.

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Didn't want to wake up and I doubt anyone reading it did!!!

I think that you couldn't have improved it in any shape or form.

[IAmFiyah]

There was a lot of good imagery in here. I liked the flow of the poem and how it ended so abruptly.

[Bexfinch]

this is a great poem it flows beautifully and has great imagery. Great poem!!!!

[Crowley]

relaxing, beautiful and dreamy...just like you intended. I loved this sweet.

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Nicely done kid. This poem is really peaceful and calming. I like that about it. It takes you back to your happy place....sort of!? Bu yeah, you get the idea.

[Michael X]

I don't quite understand the punctuation, you did an awsome job with the topic scenery, blue breeze, endless oceans, silver and sun, very serene.
beautifully done adora

[Romeion Case]

hmmmmm soothing to say the least. I'm from the caribbean and that just took me back home to a very pleasant place. :-)

[Iota]

I was just on vacation and its time to wake up!! :) Most miss the beauty of nature and how calming it can be. We over look it with our busy schedules and appointments. If we sit back and take it in it is like meditation isn't it? I like the twist at the end for we all are called back to reality. Great write :)