Without You

Bleh

I cannot sleep,

I can’t stop,

Smiling.

I cannot breathe,

My heart is,

Flying.

This cannot die,

I can’t stop what’s not,

 Meant to.

I cannot lie,

I can’t live,

Without you.

Author's Note

Let Me Know What You Think.

Reviews

[ChristianM]

Reminds me of how I feel whenever I see a beautiful woman, I instantly envision myself marrying her and madly in love. Then I slap myself back to reality and eventually drift off again. The annoyances of being a romantic. I often say things, deeply meaningful things that can impact a person's life, to people I barely know.
Anyway,
I really enjoyed this.
Dare I say it was Adora-ble? haha

[Iota]

It is always nice to feel this way, unless or until the person you are feeling this way about vanishes. Wonderful write~

[Alessander]

this has a very lyrical quality, almost like a country song, but without the three legged dog lol short and to the point with a basic rhyme pattern. it gets the message across.

[Antonio Valentino]

I couldn't have said it better! Yes, this cannot die.

Wonderful.
Antonio xx

[GunMetal]

This was cute =)

[Michael X]

I believe, as your writing reflects this belief, a poet must discover his or her voice
before they can start to bring in more original ideasm and wording.
I say this because I see a real consistancy in your flow, i believe once your
flow is seasoned, your poetry will go straight to the top Adora.
I liked this alot, great job.

[Crowley]

mmmmmmmmm......that's all, just mmmmmmm.

[HardCoreReFusion]

I think the passion behind your desire is what everyone dreams of finding in someone

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. The hunger and desire for someone is expressed with happiness and contentment. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dutch Jr.]

Deep sentiment and emotion portrayed in your poetry, which drives this one home. Clever rhyme scheme also, one I haven't seen in a poem before, rhyming ever three lines instead of the conventional ABAB scheme.