Oh Beautiful Spring

Bleh

 

Summer greenery,

And yellow daffodils.

Spring breezes,

And lavender frills.

Bright blue skies,

And cotton ball clouds.

Yellow white sunshine,

And pretty sounds.

Soft petals,

Oh what beauty it brings,

This perfect day,

This beautiful spring.

Author's Note

Lemme Know What You Think Please!

Reviews

[Alessander]

I like the format of this - the diction also impress an air of spring - very light and sunny. That being said, cotton ball clouds is a bit cliche, even though its an apt image and very visual. You use "beauty/ful" twice - read my profile of what I think about that lol The first stanza is def strongest, and overall it oozes spring/summer.

[GunMetal]

So simple and beautiful. This piece felt warm, and brought a smile to me. Well done.

[Vartul]

So many people have already told you 'what they think', but i'll still ramble on-
Your Description of Spring is beautiful,with wonderful Imagery.You create colors and sounds with your words,and it seems that you have a 'feel' of words.
Bleh? Never leave your descriptions like this,the reader immediately loses interest and the fickle one my switch to something else.Also,it degrades the quality of your beautiful piece.
Arasinya Adora...I've never come across such a beautiful name.Who named You? I'm not flattering you,but it seems like the name of a fairy.Perhaps i'll use it in one of my Stories.

[Dutch Jr.]

Creative structure, like Mike said. Your use of color to set the mood of spring was magnificent; you most certainly captured spring with your use imagery. "Cotton ball clouds", "Lavender frills", and "soft petals" were my favorite images. Very nice write.

[Mike Espinosa]

Your structure is intriguing. The four-line stanzas work efficiently with your imagery. Not only that, but your rhymes don't feel forced, which is hard to pull off in this kind of structure. Very good descriptions. The structure is a bit thought-provoking. The middle looks like the center of a flower, and the other two could be the first pedals budding, but that image is a bit hard to capture. Overall, this is a very good piece. Well done.

[Crowley]

You make me want to go out and fly a kite. Very vivid, very simple, and very beautiful. I love spring. Nice job.

[Bexfinch]

You have the gift of imagery I could imagine every little thing thing you wrote good job !!!

[Antonio Valentino]

Beautiful sentiments, spot on flow, wonderfully crafted. A poem, as promising as spring itself.

Great piece.
Antonio

[ChristianM]

This one brought a broad smile to my face.
Thank you for that. =D
Very beautiful depiction of spring.
Awesome as always Adora

[i am skeleton jelly]

makes me glad i live right near central park. spring is great except for the whole allergies thing.